Some people think it is more important for government to spend public money on promoting healthy lifestyle in order to prevent illness than to spend it on the treatment of people who are already ill. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Nowadays, there is increasing concern over the government spending on the medical system. While some people think that the money should be spent on promoting healthy lifestyle to prevent illness, others argue that the government should use this public money to cure ill people. In my opinion, I agree with the former idea which encourages people to have a healthy lifestyle is the best way to improve the citizen’s health.
To begin with, by raising the citizen’s awareness about the healthy lifestyle, an individual would have a responsibility to their own health. For instance, the cleanliness and prestigious in food manufacture become the most priority in the decision of an individual’s choice. Moreover, having an unhealthy lifestyle also lead to some common diseases such as obesity, diabetes and hypertension. The government should not only spend money on creating campaign but also adjusting the budget to construct more public park and sports centre to encourage the citizen do more exercise on their daily basis.
On the other hand, although there is a significant increase in the demand for the medical treatment for each individual, the money expense on these treatments is considerably large. The government do have a certain fund to fulfil this need by encouraging the citizen to engage in national insurance. Thus, in my opinion, the government should invest more money in medical research to create more efficient treatment method or vaccine to immunize children for preventing illness rather than curing only a small group of patients.
In conclusion, I personally believe that the government should be more concerned with promoting healthy lifestyle.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, moreover, so, thus, while, for instance, in conclusion, such as, in my opinion, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 13.1623246493 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 10.4138276553 48% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 12.0 24.0651302605 50% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 41.998997996 86% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1432.0 1615.20841683 89% => OK
No of words: 264.0 315.596192385 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.42424242424 5.12529762239 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.03089032464 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.99217490331 2.80592935109 107% => OK
Unique words: 155.0 176.041082164 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.587121212121 0.561755894193 105% => OK
syllable_count: 448.2 506.74238477 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 5.43587174349 37% => OK
Article: 6.0 2.52805611222 237% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.2915455697 49.4020404114 84% => OK
Chars per sentence: 130.181818182 106.682146367 122% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.0 20.7667163134 116% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.5454545455 7.06120827912 164% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.328489229235 0.244688304435 134% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.110590457114 0.084324248473 131% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0780803127027 0.0667982634062 117% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.191323961839 0.151304729494 126% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0854723474475 0.056905535591 150% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.1 13.0946893788 123% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 38.66 50.2224549098 77% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 11.3001002004 122% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.45 12.4159519038 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.13 8.58950901804 106% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 78.4519038076 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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