Advertising discourages people from being different individuals by making us want to be and to look the same. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Advertising has impact consumer behaviour in recent years. Due to advertising consumers ended up buying the same things and look a alike to each other. In my opinion, advertising has definitely changed the buying behaviour, specially in cloths and other trends, but this is certainly true for specific group of people.

The role of advertising is to promote their product and target people to buy them. For example, fashion industry. Certain times advertising shows us what to wear and what kind of colour to wear in certain season. You will find many youngster to wear those colour and cloths very next day. They are the fashion followers and fashion industry target them. As a result, who influence with this easily, will look like same with less individuality in trying to be considered fashionable.

However, these are some consumers who does not get effected by these advertisement. They follow the fashion trend but same time thy modify it in the way which suits them. For example, one wear those trendy cloths but in different colour which suit to their skin colour or go along with the hair style. These small changes make their individuality intact and same time they are with in fashion range as well.

In sum up, advertisement influence consumers, and kill their identity but the same time there are ones who modify the fashion according to their suitability.

Votes
Average: 5.6 (1 vote)

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 130, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...nded up buying the same things and look a alike to each other. In my opinion, adv...
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Line 3, column 228, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun youngster seems to be countable; consider using: 'many youngsters'.
Suggestion: many youngsters
...o wear in certain season. You will find many youngster to wear those colour and cloths very ne...
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Line 5, column 64, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this advertisement' or 'these advertisements'?
Suggestion: this advertisement; these advertisements
... consumers who does not get effected by these advertisement. They follow the fashion trend but same...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, look, so, well, for example, kind of, as a result, in my opinion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 13.1623246493 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 7.85571142285 25% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 22.0 24.0651302605 91% => OK
Preposition: 30.0 41.998997996 71% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1150.0 1615.20841683 71% => OK
No of words: 230.0 315.596192385 73% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.0 5.12529762239 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.89432290496 4.20363070211 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.61382105193 2.80592935109 93% => OK
Unique words: 132.0 176.041082164 75% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.573913043478 0.561755894193 102% => OK
syllable_count: 352.8 506.74238477 70% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.2975951904 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 36.4739213518 49.4020404114 74% => OK
Chars per sentence: 82.1428571429 106.682146367 77% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.4285714286 20.7667163134 79% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.85714285714 7.06120827912 83% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 3.4128256513 234% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.168517969271 0.244688304435 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0544508214132 0.084324248473 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0452914540231 0.0667982634062 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0945197379521 0.151304729494 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0462901800354 0.056905535591 81% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.3 13.0946893788 79% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 50.2224549098 127% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 11.3001002004 74% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.42 12.4159519038 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.73 8.58950901804 90% => OK
difficult_words: 48.0 78.4519038076 61% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 9.78957915832 72% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.1190380762 83% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Minimum 250 words wanted.

Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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