Advertising discourages people from being different individuals by making us all want to do the same. To what extent do you agree or disagree.
Some people believe that advertisement threatens diversity as it encourages individuals to desire similar products. Although there are some merits to advertisement such as raising awareness and accelerate the flow of information about new advancements, its detrimental effects on the identity of the society is far more significant to be ignored.
On the one hand, corporations present their new achievements to the world so that people can choose more efficiently while considering all their options. For example, without announcing a brand new cell-phone with ability of fingerprint detection, only a small number of people would be aware of this innovation. It not only impacts the manufacturer's profit immensely but also deprives tech enthusiasts from getting their dream gadget. In addition, advertisement can contribute to building a well-informed community through introducing products that can have a great influence on people's health. Take condoms for an instance, showing them openly in the television and talking about the safe sex has been proved to help adolescents to be more careful.
On the other hand, people get bombarded by various kind of advertisements, which target different needs of human beings from foods to communication devices. Media tries to use celebrities' fame as a means to convince commoners that if they want to be loved and respected as their idols, they should purchase the same products as their role models. This trick most of all affects youngsters who are in dire need of attention. Therefore, when something becomes a trend, every teenagers tries its hardest to obtain the same hairstyle, pair of jeans or cell-phone. As a result, wherever you look, you see people who are similar to each other without having anything that represents their own individuality or taste. Furthermore, those individual who try to preserve their authenticity are often get laughed at by their peers and perceived to be outsiders.
In conclusion, although advertisements open new windows of opportunities, their impact on people's personality should not be overlooked.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, if, look, so, then, therefore, thus, well, while, for example, in addition, in conclusion, kind of, such as, talking about, as a result, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 24.0651302605 108% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 41.998997996 112% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.3376753507 132% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1778.0 1615.20841683 110% => OK
No of words: 325.0 315.596192385 103% => OK
Chars per words: 5.47076923077 5.12529762239 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.24591054749 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.16661579945 2.80592935109 113% => OK
Unique words: 210.0 176.041082164 119% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.646153846154 0.561755894193 115% => OK
syllable_count: 552.6 506.74238477 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 33.9357887061 49.4020404114 69% => OK
Chars per sentence: 127.0 106.682146367 119% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.2142857143 20.7667163134 112% => OK
Discourse Markers: 12.7142857143 7.06120827912 180% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.186384279914 0.244688304435 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0625792538661 0.084324248473 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0310843368193 0.0667982634062 47% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.110211363717 0.151304729494 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0265037428369 0.056905535591 47% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.9 13.0946893788 121% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 39.67 50.2224549098 79% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 11.3001002004 119% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.74 12.4159519038 119% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.78 8.58950901804 114% => OK
difficult_words: 103.0 78.4519038076 131% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 17.0 9.78957915832 174% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.