Art and music are considered some of the fundamental elements of all societies. Do you think art and music still have a place in today’s modern world of technology? Should children spend more time learning art and music at school?
Our existence and the environment we are living in, are directly connected to art and music. Despite the technological advances, I believe these two still have priority in humans’ life, even at school children have opportunity to learn considering that other subjects should not be dismissed.
In todays’ hectic pace of modern life, people are seeking for peace, rest, joy and passion, which could be found in art. Listening to music or creating a piece of art could change individuals’ mood and be stimulating that leads to higher performances. In addition, through music and other branches of arts, nations could communicate and talk. Art act as a common language and help people from all over the world get together apart from their belief, nationality or color and while politicians could not solve their disagreement, artists or fans of arts could cooperate in a proper way.
In my point of view, holding art classes at school is beneficial; however, it should not affect other fields of study. Learning science and art have a significant role in the path to adulthood. Former help children to think logically, gain skills to solve problem, analyze the situation, the latter improve their imagination, and active their creativity and the result would be to discover pupils’ talent. For this reason, students could study in a major which suits their personality and society would have incentives professional.
In conclusion, it seems to me that art and music have a special place in our daily life and would help to release pressure in the modern world, although, it would be wrong to devote more time to it at school in comparison with other topics.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: This verb is used with infinitive: 'to consider'.
Suggestion: to consider
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Message: The proper name in singular (Art) must be used with a third-person verb: 'acts'.
Suggestion: acts
...nations could communicate and talk. Art act as a common language and help people fr...
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Message: Consider replacing "in a proper way" with adverb for "proper"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...artists or fans of arts could cooperate in a proper way. In my point of view, holding art cl...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... life and would help to release pressure in the modern world, although, it would ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, so, still, while, apart from, in addition, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 7.85571142285 153% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 10.4138276553 163% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 20.0 24.0651302605 83% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 41.998997996 100% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1411.0 1615.20841683 87% => OK
No of words: 276.0 315.596192385 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.11231884058 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.07593519647 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.87918120566 2.80592935109 103% => OK
Unique words: 167.0 176.041082164 95% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.605072463768 0.561755894193 108% => OK
syllable_count: 431.1 506.74238477 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.2975951904 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 59.6898319068 49.4020404114 121% => OK
Chars per sentence: 128.272727273 106.682146367 120% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.0909090909 20.7667163134 121% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.27272727273 7.06120827912 89% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.370817751569 0.244688304435 152% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.133349970815 0.084324248473 158% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0639112379042 0.0667982634062 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.226607730886 0.151304729494 150% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0503690448079 0.056905535591 89% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.2 13.0946893788 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 50.2224549098 92% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 11.3001002004 115% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.65 12.4159519038 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.0 8.58950901804 105% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 78.4519038076 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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