Children today play very violent games. This must be the reason for the increase in violence and crime in most major cities of the world.What are your opinions on this?

In modern world, more number of children are indulging in crime in contrast to past. Although, many people think, it is entirely because of the violence shown by media on TV. However, I do not completely agree this this notion, in fact, I believe that there are many other factors contributing to it and it would not be justified to blame the media for it totally.

Firstly, most of the TV programmes and movies show a lot of ferocity which is brain washing naive children. This immature generation does not have the wisdom to differentiate between right and wrong and thus they not only assimilate this matter but indeed implement it in real life which is quite fatal. I can reminiscence one incident occurred in the capital of India recently. One young boy stabbed a girl brutally simply because she rejected him. Later, he confessed that he got inspired watching a programme. Though, there are a slew of examples but this one explicitly proves my point.

Secondly, parents are also responsible for the incessant rise in fierceness in children up to a great extent. Most of the parents are willing to do anything to please their child and to make them comfortable. In order to do so, they give them a luxurious life style along with plenty of money to spend as per their own wish. This in fact, makes them arrogant, irresponsible, obstinate and most importantly they can not accept rejection. Furthermore, in most of the families, both the parents are working and are unable to devote attention towards children which in turn provides them the liberty to do anything.

To recapitulate, I would mention assertively that before pointing at the media, we must try to find out our own faults in raising children. We must spend quality time with them discussing their difficulties that they are going through. Plus we should supervise them while watching TV and encourage them to see more of informative channels. In addition, we must not give them extra money to spend lavishly by teaching them the significance of it. This will certainly make them a responsible and wise citizen.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, furthermore, however, if, second, secondly, so, thus, while, in addition, in contrast, in fact, in contrast to, to a great extent

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 48.0 24.0651302605 199% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 53.0 41.998997996 126% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1732.0 1615.20841683 107% => OK
No of words: 356.0 315.596192385 113% => OK
Chars per words: 4.86516853933 5.12529762239 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.34372677135 4.20363070211 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73650295601 2.80592935109 98% => OK
Unique words: 206.0 176.041082164 117% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.578651685393 0.561755894193 103% => OK
syllable_count: 543.6 506.74238477 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 5.43587174349 239% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 16.0721442886 118% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.8192059157 49.4020404114 79% => OK
Chars per sentence: 91.1578947368 106.682146367 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.7368421053 20.7667163134 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.21052631579 7.06120827912 116% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.9879759519 226% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.173170324112 0.244688304435 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0502857117671 0.084324248473 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0423580716501 0.0667982634062 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.107889746619 0.151304729494 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0452464445961 0.056905535591 80% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.9 13.0946893788 83% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 50.2224549098 123% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 11.3001002004 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.97 12.4159519038 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.21 8.58950901804 96% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 78.4519038076 106% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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