In developing countries, children in rural communities have less access to education. Some people believe that the problem can be solved by providing more schools and
teachers, while others think that the problem can be solved by providing computers and Internet access. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
Providing educational services for students who do not live in urban areas has become a frequent topic of debate in many developing societies. Whilst many people believe in construction more school as a remedy, there is another group who think the most effective measure is online learning. This essay will discuss both prospective and I will state my attitude.
To begin with, it is obvious that the much amount of we learn about the world is controlled by schools and all the materials that are offered at any kind of educational institutes. If we take this view that all of the children should have constant access to educational services, whether they live in developed countries or in less-developed nations, it is logical to suggest more schools must be built. However, this statement requires some fundamental steps such as providing an appropriate place, providing compulsory equipment and staff, and well-trained tutors. This process needs a great amount of budget that government should allocate. For instance, many rural areas in Iran need well-equipped buildings.
On the other hand, there is a tendency that in today’s contemporary world, online learning should be developed more. Using the cutting-edge technological advancements in education is receiving a principle amount of attention. For example, in many rural areas in Japan students use their own electrical gadgets such as computers or tablets to connect to the Internet and study their lessons. Online learning triggers students to use technology in other aspects of their life such as shopping or can promote their creativity and intelligence. The role that online schools play in the reduction of traffic congestion is hard to ignore. Although students who live in the remote areas benefit from this method significantly, online learning brings a new set of concerns. The chief among them has necessitated infrastructure for the Internet web which can be expensive.
In conclusion, considering all the mentioned points, it seems that both outlooks have their own merits and drawbacks. However, on balance, I tend to believe that the advantages of online learning in this modern world outweigh the benefits of conventional schools.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, look, so, well, for example, for instance, in conclusion, kind of, such as, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 7.30460921844 164% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 24.0651302605 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 43.0 41.998997996 102% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.3376753507 132% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1872.0 1615.20841683 116% => OK
No of words: 349.0 315.596192385 111% => OK
Chars per words: 5.36389684814 5.12529762239 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.32221490584 4.20363070211 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.99172510874 2.80592935109 107% => OK
Unique words: 203.0 176.041082164 115% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.581661891117 0.561755894193 104% => OK
syllable_count: 576.9 506.74238477 114% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.5154505109 49.4020404114 82% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.117647059 106.682146367 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.5294117647 20.7667163134 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.11764705882 7.06120827912 101% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 3.4128256513 264% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.211581588311 0.244688304435 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0588140083904 0.084324248473 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0568915169657 0.0667982634062 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.111661004792 0.151304729494 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0537368853528 0.056905535591 94% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.1 13.0946893788 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.72 50.2224549098 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.81 12.4159519038 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.42 8.58950901804 110% => OK
difficult_words: 106.0 78.4519038076 135% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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