Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
"Governments should focus their budget on environmental protection than on economic development."
Making decisions about how governments should manage their budget to improve their country is a significant consideration. Based on the priority of society, rulers should decide where the best place to spending budget is. The specific controversial question which arises here is whether governments should invest in improving the environment or economy. From my point of view, concentrating on economic growth can offer a variety of benefits that cannot be easily overlooked. There are two convincing reasons to support this idea.
First of all, by economic development, the rate of unemployment will decrease. As a matter of fact, if leaders of a society try to improve the economy, people's futures, especially among youngsters, would be assured since there are many job opportunities for them. In other words, industries and companies need human resources to be productive. People, therefore, will be offered a chance to be hired and earn income to guarantee their future lives. To be more specific, consider a boy who lives in the countryside. He does not have a chance to be recruited in a thriving industry unless there is economic development in the country. He, thus, might be offered to immigrate to the country to work as a worker with a minimum wage for a corporation that needs human labor. On the other hand, if there were no economic growth, he had to continue his father's work and become a farmer, for example. However, working in a big city, he may make sure that he and his next generations will grow up in a town full of facilities and have a proper career. Had it not been for the government concentration on economic development, such a boy would not have achieved this position in his life.
Secondly, another remarkable fact is that the ones who are responsible for decision-making in a government can lead to profits by focusing on economic improvement. Without doubt, a country whose economy is developed can reach its goal in international businesses via by bringing a large amount of money back to the land. Nevertheless, investing in environmental protection is a sort of a waste of money owing to the fact that there are a lot of private companies and campaigns which care about the environment and are prosperous in doing this. Hence, the government should concentrate on more vital factors that can make profits and currency for the country. This way, the rulers can allocate those amount of money to improve other aspects of society, such as helping private companies to do their duties as efficiently as possible. With this in mind, I remember my cousin, Ali, who has a main role in the government, mentioned that a committee decided to spend the budget from taxes instilling money to the economy for some reasons---as everything was secure in the government, he could not tell us what reasons were. After only six months, he said to us by doing that, not only could the government broaden its relationship with many foreign countries, but it also could make profits, which were more than any investment in the past. As a result, the government expends spends the money to improve improving people's lifestyles. Contemplating Ali's experience and my personal observations, I can readily conclude that it would be extremely advantageous for both people and governments to spend their budget on economic growth.
As outlined above, I do believe that decision-makers in governments should manage their budget to be spent on economic development so that they can reduce the rate of unemployment and make profits.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 9, column 379, Rule ID: KIND_OF_A[1]
Message: Don't include 'a' after a classification term. Use simply 'sort of'.
Suggestion: sort of
...esting in environmental protection is a sort of a waste of money owing to the fact that t...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, hence, however, if, look, may, nevertheless, second, secondly, so, still, therefore, thus, for example, sort of, such as, as a matter of fact, as a result, first of all, in other words, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 27.0 13.1623246493 205% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 25.0 7.85571142285 318% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 19.0 7.30460921844 260% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 47.0 24.0651302605 195% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 82.0 41.998997996 195% => OK
Nominalization: 24.0 8.3376753507 288% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2967.0 1615.20841683 184% => OK
No of words: 589.0 315.596192385 187% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.03735144312 5.12529762239 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.92639038232 4.20363070211 117% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.99660200945 2.80592935109 107% => OK
Unique words: 301.0 176.041082164 171% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.51103565365 0.561755894193 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 948.6 506.74238477 187% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 5.43587174349 166% => OK
Article: 6.0 2.52805611222 237% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 6.0 2.10420841683 285% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.76152304609 168% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 16.0721442886 156% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.6611591377 49.4020404114 109% => OK
Chars per sentence: 118.68 106.682146367 111% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.56 20.7667163134 113% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.84 7.06120827912 125% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 8.67935871743 196% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.4128256513 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.186283476507 0.244688304435 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.052777676413 0.084324248473 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.045723078954 0.0667982634062 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.131294635308 0.151304729494 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0381895550395 0.056905535591 67% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.1 13.0946893788 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 50.2224549098 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.25 12.4159519038 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.66 8.58950901804 101% => OK
difficult_words: 145.0 78.4519038076 185% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 9.78957915832 77% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.