Governments give a lot of support to artists, even though some people think it is a waste of money that could have been used elsewhere.
Discuss both views and give your opinion?
Some people think it is an improper utilization of resources but still the government provides huge assistance to artists. Large sums of money is required to buy and build stages for musicians. While the kids in our country are suffering from lack of resources at their schools. Although, the artists need a stage or auditorium to show their talents, however I believe these resources given to the education sector would be more beneficial to a country.
Musicians and other performers need the support from the state to provide them with a platform to shine. Talented individuals require a great amount of exposure and popularity to succeed or else they get shut off by the society and fail. For example, a student in our class became a well-known musician because he was given a chance to perform at the country festival. I believe great artists have talents that cannot be hidden and are always recognized by a society, no matter how much support they receive from the government.
Money can be used to improve the education system. Government should spend on enhancing the education system in our country because there is a greater need for that. For example, some public schools in our city are overflowing with students, this results in poor performance of the students. I believe that having a bigger budget for education is more important at the moment.
In conclusion, I would say that artists can develop themselves and the government spending should focus on improving the education system.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, so, still, well, while, for example, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 22.0 24.0651302605 91% => OK
Preposition: 34.0 41.998997996 81% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.3376753507 144% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1256.0 1615.20841683 78% => OK
No of words: 251.0 315.596192385 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.00398406375 5.12529762239 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.98032404683 4.20363070211 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71692700566 2.80592935109 97% => OK
Unique words: 148.0 176.041082164 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.589641434263 0.561755894193 105% => OK
syllable_count: 395.1 506.74238477 78% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.76152304609 21% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 33.6534725254 49.4020404114 68% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.6153846154 106.682146367 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.3076923077 20.7667163134 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.92307692308 7.06120827912 70% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.105661568336 0.244688304435 43% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0397717585497 0.084324248473 47% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0356387486326 0.0667982634062 53% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.064302562729 0.151304729494 42% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0132817528761 0.056905535591 23% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.8 13.0946893788 90% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 50.2224549098 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.72 12.4159519038 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.29 8.58950901804 97% => OK
difficult_words: 59.0 78.4519038076 75% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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