It has been suggested that all young adults should be required to undertake a period of unpaid work helping people in the community Would the drawbacks of such a requirement be greater than the benefits to the community and the individual young adults

Community service and voluntary work is always considered as secondary to our professional growth. Our parents are so busy in tuning us as better engineers, doctors and tend to forget to teach how important doing free service once in a while. We can see this attitude especially in young adults who are aspiring to become software analysts, medical students. Main reason for this situation, is probably they fail to see relevance of social activities to their career development. Hence, sociologists opine that it is very important to consider the idea of mandating youth to participate in unpaid work for short period as part of academic curriculum. I strongly agree with this notion as benefits outweigh drawbacks if any by implementing this experiment. Let’s look into various occasions and possible community service we can relate to them along with positive benefits it has.
Students who are preparing for Administrative exams should spare some time for voluntary teaching to under privileged children which will enable them to refresh their memory in basic education. Graduates who are training for police academy should concentrate on orphanage homes and prepare for emergency needs during floods or earthquakes. Hospitals can use some extra hands from medical college students for giving first aid and nursing babies. Animal husbandry, fire station, nursery schools are some quintessential services which can provide opportunity for those who want to have experience as freelancers. Apart, we have some companies who can offer unpaid internship programmes to freshers for first hand experience.
Engaging in these activities let us to think out of the box in critical moments which can spontaneous solution to the problem. A survey conducted by Harvey University reveals that candidates who push themselves for extra-curricular activities have dexterity in solving crisis to those who restrict to academic excellence. Afterall, without soft skills surviving in any job is impossible and those are not topics covered in any syllabus. On the other hand, society can make significant benefit from enthusiastic candidates as their contribution help economically as well. As outcome of discussion speaks itself there is no reason to not make compulsory rule of social service in all curriculum's.
In conclusion we can all agree to the fact that needs of the many outweigh needs of the few. This way we can progress for utopia.

Votes
Average: 8.9 (1 vote)

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 323, Rule ID: AFTERALL[1]
Message: Did you mean 'after all'?
Suggestion: After all
...se who restrict to academic excellence. Afterall, without soft skills surviving in any j...
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Line 4, column 572, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “As” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...contribution help economically as well. As outcome of discussion speaks itself the...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, hence, if, look, second, so, thus, well, while, in conclusion, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 7.85571142285 153% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 7.30460921844 178% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 24.0651302605 133% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 51.0 41.998997996 121% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.3376753507 132% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2057.0 1615.20841683 127% => OK
No of words: 383.0 315.596192385 121% => OK
Chars per words: 5.37075718016 5.12529762239 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.42384287591 4.20363070211 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.95417858124 2.80592935109 105% => OK
Unique words: 237.0 176.041082164 135% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.618798955614 0.561755894193 110% => OK
syllable_count: 663.3 506.74238477 131% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 16.0721442886 118% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 36.0392983413 49.4020404114 73% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.263157895 106.682146367 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.1578947368 20.7667163134 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.84210526316 7.06120827912 69% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.67935871743 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0816932290657 0.244688304435 33% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0265121744552 0.084324248473 31% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0303073431434 0.0667982634062 45% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0460231952673 0.151304729494 30% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0434545706428 0.056905535591 76% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.9 13.0946893788 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.72 50.2224549098 85% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.87 12.4159519038 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.66 8.58950901804 112% => OK
difficult_words: 122.0 78.4519038076 156% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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