More and more people are becoming seriously overweight Some people say that the price increase of fattening foods will solve this problem To what extend do you agree or disagree

Erstwhile, especially in children, obesity is becoming common. However, this ratio is abnormally high in developed countries. In this context, we will discuss various contributing factors and their possible effect on kids. Alongwith those causes we will try to figure-out it's effects on kids and try to find solution based on relevant examples.

Prosperous nations, with rich natural resources and financial stability, are well equipped in providing comforts to their citizens and children. Obviously, this means, there is little difficulty in acquiring basic needs. As this being the case. parents capacity to provide luxurious and rich food is far more easier and not restricted to children. Even if guardians are poor, in any case, government bodies can extend their supply to those under below poverty line. Whereas, these supplements whether from family or state, if are consumed in excess one's metabolic activity might result in over-weight. On the other hand ubiquitous availability of gadgets, in scientifically advanced cities, means higher screen addiction rate in youth. For instance, in United States of America it's hard to see a kid without using a mobile and this proportion is 35% more than African nations.

One often forgotten factor, in this scenario, is lack of interest in playing games like Cricket, football. These outdoor sports not only bring physical fitness but also control body weight. Nevertheless, few argue about hormonal and heriditary problems which are also equally responsible for excessive mass. In addition, junk meals mitigating the circumstances to the border line cholestrol. Therefore, doctors and dieticians recommend to follow 'Body Mass Index' rule for striking the balance between vigour and lifestyle. Accordingly, teenagers should maintain their mass in hormonoius to their height and personality. Instead of fastfood, nutritional snacks are preferred by experts. In order to burn additional calories parents need to encourage their kids for exercise and swimming. If additional weight is not reduced, children are likely prone to heart and kidney disorders. Moreover, psychological discomfort caused by irregular shape can result in depression. Similarly, people with abnormal heaviness tend to be less active as their physique does not co-operate for routine works.As a result, they have to face social awkwardness in front of every one.

In a nutshell, we can conclude the topic, by accepting that obesity is mainly attributed to the over feeding and genetic problem. Nonetheless, with perseverance and dedication it can be easily tackled. Wealthy countries can issue guidelines through health ministry for taking steps and bringing awareness to citizens.

Votes
Average: 8.4 (2 votes)

Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Use only 'easier' (without 'more') when you use the comparative.
Suggestion: easier
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Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'recommend following'.
Suggestion: recommend following
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, also, but, however, if, moreover, nevertheless, nonetheless, similarly, so, therefore, well, whereas, while, for instance, in addition, as a result, in any case, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 13.1623246493 129% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 10.4138276553 173% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 7.30460921844 27% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 25.0 24.0651302605 104% => OK
Preposition: 61.0 41.998997996 145% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2301.0 1615.20841683 142% => OK
No of words: 412.0 315.596192385 131% => OK
Chars per words: 5.58495145631 5.12529762239 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.50530610838 4.20363070211 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.8759616456 2.80592935109 102% => OK
Unique words: 286.0 176.041082164 162% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.694174757282 0.561755894193 124% => OK
syllable_count: 712.8 506.74238477 141% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 13.0 4.76152304609 273% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 16.0721442886 162% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.2975951904 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 33.8333017557 49.4020404114 68% => OK
Chars per sentence: 88.5 106.682146367 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.8461538462 20.7667163134 76% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.38461538462 7.06120827912 105% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.01903807615 159% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.67935871743 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 3.4128256513 264% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0935458578026 0.244688304435 38% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0222193117928 0.084324248473 26% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0268581598573 0.0667982634062 40% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0515618039956 0.151304729494 34% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.029231663995 0.056905535591 51% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 13.0946893788 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.79 50.2224549098 95% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.3001002004 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.79 12.4159519038 119% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.59 8.58950901804 123% => OK
difficult_words: 162.0 78.4519038076 206% => Less difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 9.78957915832 61% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.1190380762 79% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 308, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...-out its effects on kids and try to find solution based on relevant examples. ...
^^
Line 3, column 77, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...l resources and financial stability, are well equipped in providing comforts to t...
^^
Line 3, column 224, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “As” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...le difficulty in acquiring basic needs. As this being the case. parents capacity t...
^^
Line 3, column 248, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Parents
...ng basic needs. As this being the case. parents capacity to provide luxurious and rich ...
^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 307, Rule ID: MOST_COMPARATIVE[2]
Message: Use only 'easier' (without 'more') when you use the comparative.
Suggestion: easier
... provide luxurious and rich food is far more easier and not restricted to children. Even if...
^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 427, Rule ID: ADMIT_ENJOY_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'recommend following'.
Suggestion: recommend following
...trol. Therefore, doctors and dieticians recommend to follow Body Mass Index rule for striking the b...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 763, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...parents need to encourage their kids for exercise and swimming. If additional wei...
^^
Line 5, column 1090, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: As
...e does not co-operate for routine works.As a result, they have to face social awkw...
^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, also, but, however, if, moreover, nevertheless, nonetheless, similarly, so, therefore, well, whereas, while, for instance, in addition, as a result, in any case, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 13.1623246493 129% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 10.4138276553 173% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 7.30460921844 27% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 25.0 24.0651302605 104% => OK
Preposition: 61.0 41.998997996 145% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2301.0 1615.20841683 142% => OK
No of words: 412.0 315.596192385 131% => OK
Chars per words: 5.58495145631 5.12529762239 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.50530610838 4.20363070211 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.8759616456 2.80592935109 102% => OK
Unique words: 286.0 176.041082164 162% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.694174757282 0.561755894193 124% => OK
syllable_count: 712.8 506.74238477 141% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 13.0 4.76152304609 273% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 16.0721442886 162% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.2975951904 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 33.8333017557 49.4020404114 68% => OK
Chars per sentence: 88.5 106.682146367 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.8461538462 20.7667163134 76% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.38461538462 7.06120827912 105% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.01903807615 159% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.67935871743 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 3.4128256513 264% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0935458578026 0.244688304435 38% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0222193117928 0.084324248473 26% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0268581598573 0.0667982634062 40% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0515618039956 0.151304729494 34% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.029231663995 0.056905535591 51% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 13.0946893788 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.79 50.2224549098 95% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.3001002004 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.79 12.4159519038 119% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.59 8.58950901804 123% => OK
difficult_words: 162.0 78.4519038076 206% => Less difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 9.78957915832 61% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.1190380762 79% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.