In many countries kids are engaged in some kind of paid work. Some people regard this as completely wrong, while others consider it valuable work experience, important for learning and taking responsibility. what are your opinion on this.
It goes without thought that child labour is one on of the most important issue of the world. Some countries find it suitable while others are in opposition of this thought. In my opinion, Children should not allowed to work until the completion of their high school education. I would like to represent few arguments in favour of my opinion as follows.
To initiate with, kids are vulnerable till the age of seventeen. They should be nourished with education and guidelines during this age period. Education can give them knowledge about different aspect of life which is very important to understand before taking any working responsibilities. Till they attempt the age of seventeen, kids should allow to enjoy their childhood in place of ruining it behind hardness of life.
Moreover, once the kids are getting engaged in to the paid work, they will not be able to complete their study or can not show interest in study at later stage of life. They become money minded and may not value the importance of education in their life. In today's competitive age where education is very important for bright future,less educated children will not get valued in society. It can give rise to the illiteracy ratio in the future generation which is not only the threat for the society but also for the threat of the future of the nation.
On the contrary, If we throw light on other aspect of the issue, there are many less fortunate countries where kids are forced to indulge in to the paid work in smaller age so that they can hold the responsibility of bread-earner in their family.In such cases, the government of that country should allow only part time work along with the support of free foundation education to cope up with the current and future competition.
To summing up all the above points, I can conclude that kids are the future of any country and proper education can only strengthen the asset of the country. so, Kids should not allowed to involve in paid work till the completion of their foundation education.
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Essay evaluation report
one on of the most important issue
one on of the most important issues
flaws:
Try to use less pronouns (like 'It, I, They, We, You...') as the subject of a sentence. like:
they will not be able to complete their study or can not show interest in study at later stage of life.
They become money minded and may not value the importance of education in their life.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 6.5 out of 9
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 1 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 14 15
No. of Words: 352 350
No. of Characters: 1642 1500
No. of Different Words: 177 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.331 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.665 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.506 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 108 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 76 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 51 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 40 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 25.143 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 16.974 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.5 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.336 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.598 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.101 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 50, Rule ID: ON_OF_THE[1]
Message: Did you mean 'one'?
Suggestion: one
...ithout thought that child labour is one on of the most important issue of the worl...
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Line 1, column 117, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...sue of the world. Some countries find it suitable while others are in opposition ...
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Line 1, column 211, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'should' requires the base form of the verb: 'allow'
Suggestion: allow
...ght. In my opinion, Children should not allowed to work until the completion of their h...
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Line 1, column 219, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[2]
Message: Did you mean 'working'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'allow' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: working
...my opinion, Children should not allowed to work until the completion of their high scho...
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Line 5, column 333, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , less
...tion is very important for bright future,less educated children will not get valued i...
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Line 7, column 247, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: In
...ibility of bread-earner in their family.In such cases, the government of that coun...
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Line 7, column 311, Rule ID: EN_COMPOUNDS
Message: This word is normally spelled with hyphen.
Suggestion: part-time
...nment of that country should allow only part time work along with the support of free fou...
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Line 9, column 159, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: So
...ly strengthen the asset of the country. so, Kids should not allowed to involve in ...
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Line 9, column 179, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'should' requires the base form of the verb: 'allow'
Suggestion: allow
...set of the country. so, Kids should not allowed to involve in paid work till the comple...
^^^^^^^
Line 9, column 187, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[2]
Message: Did you mean 'involving'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'allow' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: involving
...he country. so, Kids should not allowed to involve in paid work till the completion of the...
^^^^^^^^^^
Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'if', 'may', 'moreover', 'so', 'then', 'while', 'in my opinion', 'on the contrary']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.246684350133 0.247107183377 100% => OK
Verbs: 0.140583554377 0.155533422707 90% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0769230769231 0.0946595960268 81% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0503978779841 0.0501214627716 101% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0557029177719 0.0437548338989 127% => OK
Prepositions: 0.153846153846 0.122226691241 126% => OK
Participles: 0.0291777188329 0.0403226058552 72% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.60811293107 2.80594681477 93% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0344827586207 0.0326793684256 106% => OK
Particles: 0.0053050397878 0.00163938923432 324% => OK
Determiners: 0.0901856763926 0.0861772015684 105% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0397877984085 0.021408717616 186% => Less modal verbs wanted (like 'must , shall , will , should , would , can , could , may , and might').
WH_determiners: 0.0132625994695 0.011925033212 111% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2030.0 1933.35771543 105% => OK
No of words: 350.0 316.048096192 111% => OK
Chars per words: 5.8 6.12580529183 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.32530772707 4.20517956788 103% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.317142857143 0.374742101984 85% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.228571428571 0.28420135186 80% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.165714285714 0.203846283523 81% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.125714285714 0.137316102897 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.60811293107 2.80594681477 93% => OK
Unique words: 180.0 176.037074148 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.514285714286 0.56093040696 92% => OK
Word variations: 54.4804031063 60.7387585426 90% => OK
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0891783567 93% => OK
Sentence length: 23.3333333333 20.7743622355 112% => OK
Sentence length SD: 85.4882448059 49.517814964 173% => OK
Chars per sentence: 135.333333333 127.492653851 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.3333333333 20.7743622355 112% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.666666666667 0.814263465372 82% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38877755511 114% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 3.99599198397 250% => Correct essay format wanted or double check grammar & spelling issues after essay writing.
Readability: 46.1904761905 49.1944974215 94% => OK
Elegance: 1.74193548387 1.69124875643 103% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.235049700153 0.332605444948 71% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.155131993241 0.102741220458 151% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0989788585831 0.0668466124924 148% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.601228050811 0.534860350844 112% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.161736229896 0.148594505496 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.116085721148 0.134430193775 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0771370485491 0.0742795772207 104% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.435419165226 0.324371583561 134% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.108258388797 0.0638462369009 170% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.170466946428 0.228012699653 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0676994964723 0.058150111329 116% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.68436873747 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.41683366733 117% => OK
Positive topic words: 8.0 5.90881763527 135% => OK
Negative topic words: 1.0 2.5751503006 39% => OK
Neutral topic words: 4.0 1.9629258517 204% => OK
Total topic words: 13.0 10.4468937876 124% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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