It is generally accepted that families are not as close as they used to be. give some reasons why this change has happened and suggest how families could be brought closer together.
Family bonding plays a pivotal role in success of one's life. However,it has been observed that people have become more self centric and distant from their family than the two decades back. There are more technical and economical reasons behind this drastic change in the family members and their attitude. I would like to elaborate some causes and its effects along with the possible solutions to cope up with the situation.
In today's fast pace life, everyone is running behind their own routine. Kids are busy with their academic task while parents are busy with their professional and social commitments. Hectic schedules and routine life refrained the families to have quality time together. This behaviour encouraged the trend of nuclear family, old-age homes and boarding schools for children. The only solution of this situation is lying within the old family traditions. Presence of grandparents in the family can help to retain the family tradition and to transfer it to the next generation. For example, previously families are used to have dinner together. It is the quality time when all the family member can see each other and discuss about their routine. Such tradition not only increases the family bonding but also help to decrease the chances of psychological disorders that can be arises due to loneliness and stress.
Moreover, Technological advancement has also played a crucial role in widening the gap among the family. Previously, people used to meet and greet on different occasions and festivals,while, presently greeting and meeting is replace with on-line chat and talk. Nonetheless, People send gifts ,cards and wishes on-line. Many a time , person have information about the international issue but he is not aware about the sickness of his own grandparent residing with him. Though it is very difficult to avoid this advancement, it can be controlled with different tactics. Family picnics and tours, compulsory presence in family gathering and celebration are the basic solutions of these problems.
On the contrary , there are many other reason behind choosing a lonely life by the people. For example generation gap, thought differences, misunderstanding, need of privacy and so on which has also ripen a trend living in own cocoon.
All in all, family support and love can create a miracles during the low time. So , people should adopt good family values to have good family bonding.
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that can be arises due to loneliness and stress.
that can arise due to loneliness and stress.
presently greeting and meeting is replace with on-line chat
presently greeting and meeting are replaced with on-line chat
there are many other reason
there are many other reasons
flaws:
The content is not properly organized, specially for the paragraph 4. The paragraph 4 is either off the topic or break the structure( 'On the contrary ,' is used wrongly). You have this issue for other essays too.
Let analyze the topic again:
'give some reasons why this change has happened and suggest how families could be brought closer together.'
para 1: your paragraph 1 OK
para 2: reason 1 why this change has happened.
para 3: reason 2 why this change has happened.
para 4: suggest how families could be brought closer together.
re-write paragraph 4:
There are many other reasons for less family bindings. For example generation gap, thought differences, misunderstanding, need of privacy and so on which has also ripen a trend living in own cocoon. However, there are absolutely some solutions to deal with the problems. First, ....Second....
para 5: conclusion
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 6.5 out of 9
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 3 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 23 15
No. of Words: 392 350
No. of Characters: 1983 1500
No. of Different Words: 225 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.45 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.059 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.589 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 153 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 107 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 69 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 44 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 17.043 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 4.982 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.478 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.282 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.475 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.046 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Dear Reader,
Dear Reader,
As I have mentioned solution of problems in para 2 and para 3 simultaneously, Is it fine if I remove 4th paragraph? or should I separate solution of para 2 and para 3 in para 4?
I am confused . Please guide.
Regards
Bhumika
Most users use this pattern
Most users use this pattern by four paragraphs:
paragraph 1: introduction. Your ideas/opinions here.
paragraph 2: Admittedly, there are some advantages of side A. First, ... Second, ...
paragraph 3: However, still I support side B. First, ... Second, ...
paragraph 4: conclusion. my opinion....
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We want to put more content, so we make paragraph 3 to two paragraphs since it is the side we want to support. It changes to 5 paragraphs now:
paragraph 1: introduction. Your ideas/opinions here.
paragraph 2: Admittedly, there are some advantages of side A. First, ... Second, ...
paragraph 3: However, still I support side B. reason 1 + why reason 1 + example for reason 1 + a small conclusion for reason 1.
paragraph 4: In addition, reason 2 + why reason 2 + example for reason 2+ a small conclusion for reason 2.
paragraph 5: conclusion.
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the above pattern is for topics only asking ideas. If topics ask you solutions too, then the pattern a little bit change:
paragraph 1: introduction. Your ideas/opinions here.
paragraph 2: reason 1 + why reason 1 + example for reason 1 + a small conclusion for reason 1.
paragraph 3: reason 2 + why reason 2 + example for reason 2+ a small conclusion for reason 2.
paragraph 4: my solutions
paragraph 5: conclusion.
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The rule is:
write two paragraphs for the side (A or B) you will support in the essay body.
Still you can write in 4 paragraphs. You are not forced to put 5 paragraphs. You can follow this user:
http://www.testbig.com/users/sfaht1
Well, we recommend 5 paragraphs, because it is easier to develop and to organize. read this user:
http://www.testbig.com/users/hao
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 51, Rule ID: ONES[1]
Message: Did you mean 'one's'?
Suggestion: one's
...ding plays a pivotal role in success of ones life. However,it has been observed that...
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Line 1, column 69, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , it
...al role in success of ones life. However,it has been observed that people have beco...
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Line 1, column 219, Rule ID: ECONOMICAL_ECONOMIC[1]
Message: Did you mean 'economic' (=connected with economy)?
Suggestion: economic
...ades back. There are more technical and economical reasons behind this drastic change in t...
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Line 1, column 360, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...to elaborate some causes and its effects along with the possible solutions to cop...
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Line 5, column 184, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , while
...eet on different occasions and festivals,while, presently greeting and meeting is repl...
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Line 5, column 226, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'replaced'.
Suggestion: replaced
...hile, presently greeting and meeting is replace with on-line chat and talk. Nonetheless...
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Line 5, column 292, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...and talk. Nonetheless, People send gifts ,cards and wishes on-line. Many a time , ...
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Line 5, column 331, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...s ,cards and wishes on-line. Many a time , person have information about the inter...
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Line 7, column 16, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...ns of these problems. On the contrary , there are many other reason behind choo...
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Line 7, column 200, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error -- use past participle here: 'ripened'.
Suggestion: ripened
...eed of privacy and so on which has also ripen a trend living in own cocoon. All in...
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Line 9, column 48, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a miracle' or simply 'miracles'?
Suggestion: a miracle; miracles
...all, family support and love can create a miracles during the low time. So , people should...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 9, column 82, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...reate a miracles during the low time. So , people should adopt good family values ...
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'however', 'if', 'moreover', 'nonetheless', 'so', 'while', 'for example', 'on the contrary']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.267281105991 0.247107183377 108% => OK
Verbs: 0.147465437788 0.155533422707 95% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0990783410138 0.0946595960268 105% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0483870967742 0.0501214627716 97% => OK
Pronouns: 0.036866359447 0.0437548338989 84% => OK
Prepositions: 0.10599078341 0.122226691241 87% => OK
Participles: 0.0322580645161 0.0403226058552 80% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.75156222273 2.80594681477 98% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0276497695853 0.0326793684256 85% => OK
Particles: 0.00230414746544 0.00163938923432 141% => OK
Determiners: 0.0875576036866 0.0861772015684 102% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0161290322581 0.021408717616 75% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.00691244239631 0.011925033212 58% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2430.0 1933.35771543 126% => OK
No of words: 393.0 316.048096192 124% => OK
Chars per words: 6.18320610687 6.12580529183 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.45244063426 4.20517956788 106% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.394402035623 0.374742101984 105% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.282442748092 0.28420135186 99% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.193384223919 0.203846283523 95% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.129770992366 0.137316102897 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75156222273 2.80594681477 98% => OK
Unique words: 228.0 176.037074148 130% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.580152671756 0.56093040696 103% => OK
Word variations: 68.4875874775 60.7387585426 113% => OK
How many sentences: 23.0 16.0891783567 143% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0869565217 20.7743622355 82% => OK
Sentence length SD: 30.2343086832 49.517814964 61% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.652173913 127.492653851 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.0869565217 20.7743622355 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.434782608696 0.814263465372 53% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38877755511 114% => OK
Language errors: 12.0 3.99599198397 300% => Correct essay format wanted or double check grammar & spelling issues after essay writing.
Readability: 45.3312313309 49.1944974215 92% => OK
Elegance: 1.74257425743 1.69124875643 103% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.171753825219 0.332605444948 52% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.0694252864484 0.102741220458 68% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0703332632082 0.0668466124924 105% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.462152757209 0.534860350844 86% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.137451698843 0.148594505496 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0657901994324 0.134430193775 49% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0493597443548 0.0742795772207 66% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.312927887886 0.324371583561 96% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.157228127274 0.0638462369009 246% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.100083087578 0.228012699653 44% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.055376752804 0.058150111329 95% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.68436873747 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 3.41683366733 205% => Less neutral sentences wanted.
Positive topic words: 9.0 5.90881763527 152% => OK
Negative topic words: 6.0 2.5751503006 233% => OK
Neutral topic words: 6.0 1.9629258517 306% => OK
Total topic words: 21.0 10.4468937876 201% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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Note: This is not the final score. The e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.