Nowadays, there is an increasing trend of people shift from their native country to another countries after their retirement .There are plethora of reasons behind this movement like,they like to explore the new cultures,different cuisines,another traditions,however,in my observation the main reason for this scenario is social insecurity of some countries.In the following essay,I will discuss these points in details with possible outcome.
The persisting force of old people is their social security, in many countries the social security system is underdeveloped because of that the retired people attain less benefits and they fall in the insecurity mood.An example, a middle class family bread winner will be in super struggle to met their monthly goal.On the other hand many countries provide extra-ordinary benefits to their retired population and they cover all the issues in social security scheme.This imbalance leads many people to move from their own countries to developed countries for their social welbeing.
The other reason is that retire people has plenty of time in their hand ,they could explore themselves into new places,enjoy their traditions and cultures. For an example,from my place a teacher after her service she became the international cuisine writer.She explore different countries and explore their foods and conducting the research on different traditions.
There is positive as well as negative outcome may occur because of this trend.The positive side that one can refresh themselves and feel more comfortable in society,on the other hand ,in the negative side is that the people may not be adopt with the climates they may face health issues and other health related problems.
To recapitulate, people may move from one place to another place after their retirement but the one who opt to move should think themselves what is the impact and outcome they might get benefit of it.For me, seeking better social security is the priority .
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- In many countries people tend to move overseas or move to a different part of their country after their retirement Discuss why it is so and the outcomes of this situation Provide specific reasons and examples to support your opinion 73
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, may, so, well, as well as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 37.0 24.0651302605 154% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 43.0 41.998997996 102% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1676.0 1615.20841683 104% => OK
No of words: 307.0 315.596192385 97% => OK
Chars per words: 5.45928338762 5.12529762239 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.18585898806 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.97350134317 2.80592935109 106% => OK
Unique words: 168.0 176.041082164 95% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.547231270358 0.561755894193 97% => OK
syllable_count: 524.7 506.74238477 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.76152304609 168% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 6.0 16.0721442886 37% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 51.0 20.2975951904 251% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 144.888079412 49.4020404114 293% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 279.333333333 106.682146367 262% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 51.1666666667 20.7667163134 246% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 10.3333333333 7.06120827912 146% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 24.0 5.01903807615 478% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.67935871743 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.302500313676 0.244688304435 124% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.151458431386 0.084324248473 180% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0698694834364 0.0667982634062 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.16524176064 0.151304729494 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.075003166261 0.056905535591 132% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 29.9 13.0946893788 228% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: 11.25 50.2224549098 22% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 13.0 7.44779559118 175% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 24.4 11.3001002004 216% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 15.28 12.4159519038 123% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.92 8.58950901804 115% => OK
difficult_words: 73.0 78.4519038076 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 30.5 9.78957915832 312% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 22.4 10.1190380762 221% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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