Moving geographically, for finding better opportunities, is the modern trend. It is believed by some people that immigration is advantageous for children while others are of view that it is difficult for youngsters if families move abroad.However, from my perspective, I believe that relocating in foreign countries is detrimental because children experience emotional health problems due to this.
On one hand, proponents of view that moving abroad is helpful for children because it make their access to better educational system easy. To explain this further, going to different countries which have more institutions will make it accessible for all children to go to schools nearby.This can be better explained with an example, a survey conducted in East London in 2012 ,showed that all schools have maximum number of immigrants moved from different countries.Thus, this is quite evident from above discussion that going abroad will make access to educational institutions convenient for children.
On the other hand, advocates of view that children will face difficulties if families move abroad ,claim that it harms their cultural identity. To elaborate this further, children moving with families at a very young age will forget their own traditions and try to follow new culture resulting in disruption of their cultural identity. This can be better explained with an illustration, a pole carried out by the Counsel for Rights of Children in 2008 showed that, 28 percent of Nigerian children have forget about their own traditions. Hence, even this opinion holds strong heritage.
Finally, from my perspective, I believe that going to different countries will induce depression and anxiety in children.There is substantial evidence, a study done by researcher in Psychology in UNICEF , explained that 72 percent of children under 12 when moved to other countries with families we're affected emotionally.Therefore, discussion led me to believe in the significance of my stance.
To recapitulate, despite of views from both sides , I am inclined to believe that moving abroad of families causes difficulties for children because their emotional well being is affected.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, hence, however, if, so, therefore, thus, well, while, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 2.0 10.4138276553 19% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 14.0 7.30460921844 192% => OK
Pronoun: 37.0 24.0651302605 154% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 54.0 41.998997996 129% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1854.0 1615.20841683 115% => OK
No of words: 335.0 315.596192385 106% => OK
Chars per words: 5.53432835821 5.12529762239 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.27820116611 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.21121997289 2.80592935109 114% => OK
Unique words: 177.0 176.041082164 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.528358208955 0.561755894193 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 564.3 506.74238477 111% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.76152304609 168% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 16.0721442886 62% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 33.0 20.2975951904 163% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 128.769716937 49.4020404114 261% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 185.4 106.682146367 174% => OK
Words per sentence: 33.5 20.7667163134 161% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.0 7.06120827912 113% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 14.0 5.01903807615 279% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.400859906904 0.244688304435 164% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.171661283445 0.084324248473 204% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0731930901196 0.0667982634062 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.239180039522 0.151304729494 158% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0571532553826 0.056905535591 100% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 21.4 13.0946893788 163% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 29.52 50.2224549098 59% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 17.3 11.3001002004 153% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.39 12.4159519038 124% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.19 8.58950901804 107% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 78.4519038076 106% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.5 9.78957915832 158% => OK
gunning_fog: 15.2 10.1190380762 150% => OK
text_standard: 16.0 10.7795591182 148% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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