Many people work long hours, leaving very little time for leisure activities. Does this situation have more advantages or more disadvantages?

In modern day, many people spend time to work instead for leisure pursuit. For a long time, This is will have and negative impact on everyone than benefits.

First, nowadays, adults usually devote and invest time to work. They have to work than eight hours to compete others, it is very intensely. In the future, they will depressed to have depression or stress-related diseases. Besides, the economy may fall down.

Secondly, students can miss an opportunity to have the great memory with peers. They not having excitement and interest in life because they spend an entre at school they are give a heavy load of homework every night. They will have a sedentary lifestyle. Whereas cultivate a hobby can reduce stress, live a well-balance life and take people who have similar leisure activities engage in a hobby.

Eventually, people have to do household duty and daily responsibility. Parents have to take care of their children while working.

In summary, having a hobby is good for modern people.

Votes
Average: 5.6 (1 vote)

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 166, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'will' requires the base form of the verb: 'depress'
Suggestion: depress
...ery intensely. In the future, they will depressed to have depression or stress-related di...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, first, if, may, second, secondly, well, whereas, while, in summary

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 13.1623246493 30% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 1.0 7.30460921844 14% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 9.0 24.0651302605 37% => OK
Preposition: 19.0 41.998997996 45% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 2.0 8.3376753507 24% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 845.0 1615.20841683 52% => More number of characters wanted.
No of words: 167.0 315.596192385 53% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.05988023952 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.59483629437 4.20363070211 86% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.64210997058 2.80592935109 94% => OK
Unique words: 111.0 176.041082164 63% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.664670658683 0.561755894193 118% => OK
syllable_count: 275.4 506.74238477 54% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 12.0 20.2975951904 59% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 30.5577346662 49.4020404114 62% => OK
Chars per sentence: 65.0 106.682146367 61% => OK
Words per sentence: 12.8461538462 20.7667163134 62% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.76923076923 7.06120827912 82% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.4128256513 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.225344918188 0.244688304435 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0826306568696 0.084324248473 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0671478755303 0.0667982634062 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.13487349323 0.151304729494 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0875800830886 0.056905535591 154% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.8 13.0946893788 67% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.3 50.2224549098 118% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.0 11.3001002004 71% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.18 12.4159519038 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.58 8.58950901804 100% => OK
difficult_words: 46.0 78.4519038076 59% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 9.78957915832 61% => OK
gunning_fog: 6.8 10.1190380762 67% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Minimum 250 words wanted.

Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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