More and more people are becoming seriously overweight. Some people say that increasing the price of fattening foods will solve this problem. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

These days, a vast number of people are overweight.It is argued that high price of fast food should impose to resolve this issue. In my opinion this method is not effective solution.

Firstly, there is no doubt that everybody has basic right to choose. If government dictate behavior by passing lows, it will be clashed with our right to opt for ourselves, so many sociologist believe that government could just gently push or nudge people toward making correct choice. For example some countries classify foods as a healthy or unhealthy by some brief information. If a product has a green light, it is healthy and has good nutritions. If a product has red light, it has significant amount of fat, sugar and salt without any nutrient that people should be aware. As a result, shopper can glance at these information and decide to buy foods. Research finding indicate that this method has positive effect on people’s eating habits.

Furthermore, government can adopt serious approach to tackle this problems.Health official can raise public awareness about obesity and it’s consequences. So, it is provided some scientific TV programs to demonstrate that how fast food can bring about serious disease such as Obesity, Diabetes, heart problems and breathing problems. in addition participation in sports need money, for example, in our country, statistic indicate that families with income approximately 6 millions tomans monthly, only 50 percent of their children can play sports. Hence, government should encourage people to take more exercise by build free environment for different kind of physical activities.

In conclusion,Although obesity is a major problem, increasing the price of fast food is not the best solution and government should find to remedy this situation.

Votes
Average: 8.4 (1 vote)

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, furthermore, hence, if, so, for example, in addition, in conclusion, kind of, no doubt, such as, as a result, in my opinion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 7.85571142285 153% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 24.0651302605 104% => OK
Preposition: 30.0 41.998997996 71% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.3376753507 156% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1513.0 1615.20841683 94% => OK
No of words: 283.0 315.596192385 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.34628975265 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.10153676581 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.96735222683 2.80592935109 106% => OK
Unique words: 186.0 176.041082164 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.657243816254 0.561755894193 117% => OK
syllable_count: 456.3 506.74238477 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.6371267321 49.4020404114 105% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.071428571 106.682146367 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.2142857143 20.7667163134 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.92857142857 7.06120827912 141% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.01903807615 179% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.211582121012 0.244688304435 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0631005823759 0.084324248473 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0516172658157 0.0667982634062 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.130182916166 0.151304729494 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0197402315712 0.056905535591 35% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.9 13.0946893788 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 50.2224549098 102% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.75 12.4159519038 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.2 8.58950901804 107% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 78.4519038076 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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