More and more people are suffering from health problems caused by a modern lifestyle, which cannot be treated with modern medicines. Some people think that a return to traditional medicine should be encouraged.
To what extent do you agree?
Nowadays, a modern lifestyle is causing serious health issues to people, which are sometimes hard to diagnose with the latest medical treatments. Therefore, some individuals seem to encourage conventional medicines to follow again. Whilst I disagree with their viewpoint as old methods of treating disease are ineffective to treat some dangerous ailments.
Traditional medicines and herbs are not effective to cure chronic diseases, caused by lifestyle change. In other words, diseases, such as diabetes, cancer, and hypothyroidism are caused by unhealthy eating and less physical workout. Therefore, regular allopathic treatment is advisable to treat these disorders as old medicines do not work adequately in these areas. A journal ‘The Health Safety and Precautions’ of California revealed that about 75% of people have been successfully diagnosed annually for cancer, with chemotherapy and radiotherapy in developed countries; whereas people in remote areas of Africa are still following the conventional methods with only 2% of success rates.
Furthermore, old therapies generally take a long time period to diagnose the illness completely, which sometimes proved fatal. To be more specific, if a person is suffering from an acute disorder, he would require immediate treatment from a surgeon to save his life. Take, Cardio Vascular Diseases (CVDs) for instance, only a cardiologist could treat the person with a surgery or some drugs rather than using Ayurvedic remedies at home. As otherwise, such problems associated with heart can cause more severity or even the death of the person.
In conclusion, I do not believe that returning to conventional medications for treating diseases of the modern era is valid as they have less fulfilling results to cure acute and chronic ailments followed by the modern lifestyle.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 138, Rule ID: FEWER_LESS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'fewer'? The noun fulfilling is countable.
Suggestion: fewer
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
furthermore, if, so, still, therefore, whereas, for instance, in conclusion, such as, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 7.85571142285 38% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 10.0 24.0651302605 42% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 41.998997996 88% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1558.0 1615.20841683 96% => OK
No of words: 279.0 315.596192385 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.58422939068 5.12529762239 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.08696624509 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.99427561581 2.80592935109 107% => OK
Unique words: 177.0 176.041082164 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.634408602151 0.561755894193 113% => OK
syllable_count: 496.8 506.74238477 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.60771543086 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 5.43587174349 37% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 63.5366801322 49.4020404114 129% => OK
Chars per sentence: 129.833333333 106.682146367 122% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.25 20.7667163134 112% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.33333333333 7.06120827912 118% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.67935871743 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.9879759519 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.323022857051 0.244688304435 132% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0982812861452 0.084324248473 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0447698057619 0.0667982634062 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.168617949791 0.151304729494 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0352958086355 0.056905535591 62% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.5 13.0946893788 126% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 31.21 50.2224549098 62% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 11.3001002004 129% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.38 12.4159519038 124% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.49 8.58950901804 122% => OK
difficult_words: 101.0 78.4519038076 129% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 9.78957915832 107% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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