Most advertisements make products seem much better then they really are

Essay topics:

Most advertisements make products seem much better then they really are.

One of the main action to sell and boost the products is advertisement. So in this way producers could attract the cushion from customers. Despite people sometimes thinks some advertisements are exaggerating. In my point of view, I believe that advertisements even if is somehow exaggerating about the product but it helps people especially young generation to push for buying it which I think Isn’t a bad idea. In this essay, I am going to describe two main reasons which support this idea which advertisement is good even if sometimes exaggerating.
To begin with, attracting customers always is the one and only one aim for producers and sellers. In fact, sometimes some products contains of different features that ordinary customer doesn’t know about it but after watching advertisement she or he recognize that this product is the one she or he wants . Although, the product is showed more than what it is in advertisement. It helps people to buy it with the way of showing the product. For instance, a shampoo which contains many item such as conditioner but if no advertisement apply on it definitely the product wouldn’t be sold so as a result, advertisement gives some value to product to be sell.
Secondly, people like to be pushed to buy the product, as a result, no one buy a product if the product doesn’t impress them to buy. Advertisement should be little bet exaggerating to show the product better than what it is to be sale. For example, if a product like close wants to be sale so the producer should wear that close to a tine tall girl and does the effect on the model to show it very fancy and beautiful, in fact, even a person who buy the close is fat and may be doesn’t know the quality of the cloths but because she is seeing it on the model body ,she attract to buy it.
To sum up, advertisement is made to impress people to buy a product, so the action should be unique and show the product much better that what it is to be sold. Otherwise, some products with good quality but bad advertisement doesn’t effect people to buy.

Votes
Average: 6.7 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 250, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'recognizes'.
Suggestion: recognizes
... after watching advertisement she or he recognize that this product is the one she or he ...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 2, column 304, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
... this product is the one she or he wants . Although, the product is showed more th...
^^
Line 2, column 307, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Although” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...is product is the one she or he wants . Although, the product is showed more than what i...
^^^^^^^^
Line 2, column 556, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... no advertisement apply on it definitely the product wouldn’t be sold so as a res...
^^
Line 3, column 398, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'fancies'?
Suggestion: fancies
...the effect on the model to show it very fancy and beautiful, in fact, even a person w...
^^^^^
Line 3, column 563, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...cause she is seeing it on the model body ,she attract to buy it. To sum up, adver...
^^
Line 3, column 569, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'she' must be used with a third-person verb: 'attracts'.
Suggestion: attracts
...she is seeing it on the model body ,she attract to buy it. To sum up, advertisement is...
^^^^^^^
Line 4, column 225, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... with good quality but bad advertisement doesn’t effect people to buy.
^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, may, second, secondly, so, for example, for instance, i think, in fact, such as, as a result, to begin with, to sum up

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 13.1623246493 167% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 10.4138276553 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 24.0651302605 133% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 46.0 41.998997996 110% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.3376753507 132% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1703.0 1615.20841683 105% => OK
No of words: 367.0 315.596192385 116% => OK
Chars per words: 4.64032697548 5.12529762239 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37689890912 4.20363070211 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.86084266994 2.80592935109 102% => OK
Unique words: 163.0 176.041082164 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.444141689373 0.561755894193 79% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 531.0 506.74238477 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.60771543086 87% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 78.3033985356 49.4020404114 159% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.533333333 106.682146367 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.4666666667 20.7667163134 118% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.46666666667 7.06120827912 120% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.01903807615 159% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.17711597315 0.244688304435 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0766471626406 0.084324248473 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0516088105247 0.0667982634062 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.133439083469 0.151304729494 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0439737300266 0.056905535591 77% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.7 13.0946893788 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 64.04 50.2224549098 128% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.3001002004 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.93 12.4159519038 80% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.06 8.58950901804 82% => OK
difficult_words: 52.0 78.4519038076 66% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 9.78957915832 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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