Nowadays parents put too much pressure on their children to succeed.
What is the reason for doing this?
Is this a negative or positive development?
Recently, many children have been suffer a considerable amount of stress in achievement because of their parent’s enforcement. The parent’s attitude developes due to many reason and the continuoation of this trend will bring negative consequences.
First of all, one of the main factors is the utter care from parent. They always hope the best things for their children such as: a stable job with high salary, a big house, car... Therefore, they make their children to study more, achieve more in life which potentially form the pressure inside the kids. Moreover, some folks are so competitive that they force their children to be more success, more intelligent for them to show off with everyone.
In my point of view, this development is completely negative which will badly impact on children’s life. For example, if the child has to put up with a lot of strees and pressure, they will be mentally ill. They will against their parent’s desire and do what they think is right for them. In addtition to that, if the result doesn’t live up to their expectation, the children will become depression. For instance, according to data, there are 20% children in the world suicide because they think they are loser and make their parent disappointed.As we can see, has it not been for the emotionless of the parent, the children’s future would have been change.
In conclusion, though enforcement of parents might help to gain success of children, I believe that this could be psychologically disadvantageous for them. Their future is depend on family’s education. So for children today, for future tomorow
Comments
Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 35, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'suffered'.
Suggestion: suffered
Recently, many children have been suffer a considerable amount of stress in achi...
^^^^^^
Line 1, column 167, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun reason seems to be countable; consider using: 'many reasons'.
Suggestion: many reasons
... The parent’s attitude developes due to many reason and the continuoation of this trend wil...
^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 548, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: As
...oser and make their parent disappointed.As we can see, has it not been for the emo...
^^
Line 4, column 172, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'depended'.
Suggestion: depended
...sadvantageous for them. Their future is depend on family’s education. So for children ...
^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, if, moreover, so, therefore, as to, for example, for instance, in conclusion, in fact, such as, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 10.4138276553 38% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 29.0 24.0651302605 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 36.0 41.998997996 86% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1359.0 1615.20841683 84% => OK
No of words: 267.0 315.596192385 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.08988764045 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.04229324003 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.89352931353 2.80592935109 103% => OK
Unique words: 160.0 176.041082164 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.59925093633 0.561755894193 107% => OK
syllable_count: 405.0 506.74238477 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.441268274 49.4020404114 104% => OK
Chars per sentence: 97.0714285714 106.682146367 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.0714285714 20.7667163134 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.21428571429 7.06120827912 116% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.9879759519 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.327708051387 0.244688304435 134% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.115119556757 0.084324248473 137% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0554452201364 0.0667982634062 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.204887250171 0.151304729494 135% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0462581353283 0.056905535591 81% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.1 13.0946893788 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 50.2224549098 121% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 11.3001002004 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.24 12.4159519038 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.71 8.58950901804 90% => OK
difficult_words: 53.0 78.4519038076 68% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 35, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'suffered'.
Suggestion: suffered
Recently, many children have been suffer a considerable amount of stress in achi...
^^^^^^
Line 1, column 167, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun reason seems to be countable; consider using: 'many reasons'.
Suggestion: many reasons
... The parent’s attitude developes due to many reason and the continuoation of this trend wil...
^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 548, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: As
...oser and make their parent disappointed.As we can see, has it not been for the emo...
^^
Line 4, column 172, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'depended'.
Suggestion: depended
...sadvantageous for them. Their future is depend on family’s education. So for children ...
^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, if, moreover, so, therefore, as to, for example, for instance, in conclusion, in fact, such as, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 10.4138276553 38% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 29.0 24.0651302605 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 36.0 41.998997996 86% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1359.0 1615.20841683 84% => OK
No of words: 267.0 315.596192385 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.08988764045 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.04229324003 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.89352931353 2.80592935109 103% => OK
Unique words: 160.0 176.041082164 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.59925093633 0.561755894193 107% => OK
syllable_count: 405.0 506.74238477 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.441268274 49.4020404114 104% => OK
Chars per sentence: 97.0714285714 106.682146367 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.0714285714 20.7667163134 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.21428571429 7.06120827912 116% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.9879759519 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.327708051387 0.244688304435 134% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.115119556757 0.084324248473 137% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0554452201364 0.0667982634062 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.204887250171 0.151304729494 135% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0462581353283 0.056905535591 81% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.1 13.0946893788 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 50.2224549098 121% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 11.3001002004 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.24 12.4159519038 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.71 8.58950901804 90% => OK
difficult_words: 53.0 78.4519038076 68% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.