Nowadays we can watch entertainment performance from the screen Laptops etc and no need to watch it live To what entend do you agree

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Nowadays, we can watch entertainment performance from the screen (Laptops,etc) and no need to watch it live. To what entend do you agree ?

With the advancement of science and technology every thing has come to our door steps. One such thing is sport events. Now with the help of internet technology we can view real time performances of teams at home, and there is no need to travel all the way to the place of event. However, I disagree with the above change because being a part of real audience, we can experience a whole different environment which is available in stadiums only and able to socialise with peers.
When we are present in the ground our energy level is at the peak. What I mean by this is the ambiance of live performance can not be simply felt at home in front of the television screen. Those who are a part of audience can cheer for and boost the moral of their teams during the difficult situations of match. I, for instance, along with my friends was a part of spectators during Pakistan vs India T20 Cricket world cup. It was a memorable moment in our lives we cheered for our team and lift the spirit of our national team in a foreign country. Thus, the experience of physical presence can never be substituted by virtual presence.
Another advantage of being present in the stadium is being able to socialise with other people. It provides you a real time opportunity to make friends who share the same values. If people like same sport celebratories, they tend to discuss more thing which are in common and might make lasting bonds. Furthermore, In mega events, such as Word Football Cup or Olympics, people come close to each other from different parts of the world. In this way, they able to understand and appreciate each other culture and values. Therefore, we can minimize misunderstanding and hatred by becoming part of a sport event audience.
All in all, although technology made available to us to watch our favorite sports event at home, it can never replace the energetic ambiance and socializing opportunities which are only available to us by present in the stadium. It is recommended that if we have time and resources , instead of limiting ourselves to virtual reality, we must go out and experience the real life.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
furthermore, however, if, so, therefore, thus, for instance, i mean, such as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 13.1623246493 137% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 24.0651302605 129% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 60.0 41.998997996 143% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 8.3376753507 180% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1749.0 1615.20841683 108% => OK
No of words: 373.0 315.596192385 118% => OK
Chars per words: 4.6890080429 5.12529762239 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.39467950092 4.20363070211 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68213805867 2.80592935109 96% => OK
Unique words: 202.0 176.041082164 115% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.541554959786 0.561755894193 96% => OK
syllable_count: 556.2 506.74238477 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 5.43587174349 202% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 16.0721442886 112% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.6121599555 49.4020404114 92% => OK
Chars per sentence: 97.1666666667 106.682146367 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.7222222222 20.7667163134 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.22222222222 7.06120827912 60% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.4128256513 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.145463041715 0.244688304435 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0415642052864 0.084324248473 49% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0452557865365 0.0667982634062 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0837044502592 0.151304729494 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0231858493788 0.056905535591 41% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.0 13.0946893788 84% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 50.2224549098 119% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.3001002004 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.92 12.4159519038 80% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.72 8.58950901804 90% => OK
difficult_words: 73.0 78.4519038076 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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