Someone argued that residents should take care of their fitness, instead of self benefits, to their country, as a duty. I personally believe, both duty and own benefits are important for residents between different conditions, as an individual that self-health is a duty, but as for the government, their own fitness should be seen as people's own benefits.
People keep their health to create values as a duty for society to feedback the world. A kid who wants to become a useful inhabitant to fight for more benefits for society and families, can not leave government's support, which is spending lots of funding and resources. Therefore, an adult should learn how to build the world better with his own power to feedback his country, such as: educating children, supporting their own parents, helping disabled people, and these can not be achieved effectively without a fitness body or a healthy mind. Meanwhile, residents with health bodies lead to a budget increase for education, infrastructure projects and scientific research, instead of medical treatment, which can affect all citizens not only in the quality of life but also on long-term economic growth.
By contrast, as for the government, which are rules makers and keeps all residents' health as citizens' own benefits but duty. Once keeping health become a citizen's duty and be written in law that means it will be executed by polices and lords, and some accidents will happened, such as: all students must run 5 kilometers every single day, all employees must do jack jump at least 30 mins or lost their job… if so, there are lots of people with some not killed but weak illness have to damage their health by these rules.
To sum up, in my opinion, an inhabitant should see their own health as a duty to society. However, it does not mean a government should see so.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 74, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'residents'' or 'resident's'?
Suggestion: residents'; resident's
...t, which are rules makers and keeps all residents health as citizens own benefits but dut...
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Line 5, column 155, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'citizens'' or 'citizen's'?
Suggestion: citizens'; citizen's
... but duty. Once keeping health become a citizens duty and be written in law that means i...
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Line 5, column 268, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'will' requires the base form of the verb: 'happen'
Suggestion: happen
...ices and lords, and some accidents will happened, such as: all students must run 5 kilom...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, so, therefore, while, as for, at least, such as, in my opinion, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 7.85571142285 153% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 10.4138276553 144% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 19.0 24.0651302605 79% => OK
Preposition: 31.0 41.998997996 74% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1530.0 1615.20841683 95% => OK
No of words: 312.0 315.596192385 99% => OK
Chars per words: 4.90384615385 5.12529762239 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.20279927342 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.64111121345 2.80592935109 94% => OK
Unique words: 179.0 176.041082164 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.573717948718 0.561755894193 102% => OK
syllable_count: 457.2 506.74238477 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 16.0721442886 62% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 31.0 20.2975951904 153% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 102.726822203 49.4020404114 208% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 153.0 106.682146367 143% => OK
Words per sentence: 31.2 20.7667163134 150% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.7 7.06120827912 137% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.262413019796 0.244688304435 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.121713250524 0.084324248473 144% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0739642070148 0.0667982634062 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.177136163962 0.151304729494 117% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0375620369005 0.056905535591 66% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.2 13.0946893788 131% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.47 50.2224549098 97% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 11.3001002004 126% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.73 12.4159519038 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.77 8.58950901804 102% => OK
difficult_words: 71.0 78.4519038076 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 9.78957915832 138% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.4 10.1190380762 142% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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