Shopping has become a favorite pastime among young people. Why do you think it is like that, and do you think they must be encouraged to do other things rather than shopping?
In the current world of modernization, the modes of recreation among the youngsters have been changed drastically as they are now more interested in spending their mean time by doing shopping rather than any other activity. this essay will discuss the reasons why younglings prefer shopping in their free time and provide options for encouraging to do activities other than shopping.
there are two major factors why young people tend to go for shopping in their spare time. Firstly, the westenization emerging from modernization has influenced the mind of new generation to a greater extent by developing a craze in their brains of looking extraordinary on regular basis, and to do so, they spend most of their leisure time in buying new clothes and accessories for themselves ignoring all other sources of entertainment. Secondly, new age group consider this activity to be very much effective in relaxing their mind after a regular hectic schedule. The reason behind this is that they feel energetic after seeing a variety of clothes with different colors because colors are capable of cheering up the mood of a person to a greater extent. that is why, the peer group are in favour of spending their free time while doing shopping.
However, I opine that the young people should be encouraged to take part in some other activities rather than shopping as there are innumerable sources of amusement such as playing outdoor games, conversing with friends and relatives, et cetera. Performing outdoor games will help them in betterment of their body whereas conversing with people will enhance their communication skills. Thus, young-lings should be encouraged to enter other entertatining sources also.
In conclusion, unless efforts are made to shift the youngsters' interest from shopping to other hobbies, this trend will only escalate.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, however, if, look, second, secondly, so, thus, whereas, while, in conclusion, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 10.4138276553 38% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 3.0 7.30460921844 41% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 22.0 24.0651302605 91% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 41.998997996 110% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1550.0 1615.20841683 96% => OK
No of words: 296.0 315.596192385 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.23648648649 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.14784890444 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.81311422966 2.80592935109 100% => OK
Unique words: 172.0 176.041082164 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.581081081081 0.561755894193 103% => OK
syllable_count: 471.6 506.74238477 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 20.2975951904 128% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 76.6951677769 49.4020404114 155% => OK
Chars per sentence: 140.909090909 106.682146367 132% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.9090909091 20.7667163134 130% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.72727272727 7.06120827912 138% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.01903807615 120% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.221045734346 0.244688304435 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0911976442854 0.084324248473 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0645426532697 0.0667982634062 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.139169059237 0.151304729494 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0729984036566 0.056905535591 128% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.7 13.0946893788 128% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.09 50.2224549098 90% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 11.3001002004 119% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.41 12.4159519038 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.03 8.58950901804 105% => OK
difficult_words: 77.0 78.4519038076 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 9.78957915832 153% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.1190380762 123% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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