Should women join armed forces?Answer from ielts-practice.org

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Should women join armed forces?

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A lot of women joined police and military forces during the last two decades. Many of them were highly successful and they played a huge role in empowering women all over the world. They proved that nothing is impossible if one is determined to achieve it. Some people, nonetheless, feel that these jobs aren’t suitable for women. I don’t agree with this view.

Women have proved their mettle in almost every field. They have proved that they can become great scientists, soldiers, pilots, astronauts and sailors. Therefore, there is no justification for claiming that they are not suitable for joining the armed forces.

Stereotypes exist and that is the reason some people undermine the potential of women. They feel that women lack the level of fitness required for joining police or armed forces. This is a misconception and lots of women have shattered this myth. Generally speaking women are less aggressive than men. They are caring and patient. That is why they make excellent teachers and doctors. Just because women are more caring and patient than men, men never shied away from pursuing careers in those sectors. Likewise, just because women are less aggressive than men, they should not be discouraged from becoming police officers and soldiers. Countless women have already proved that they have what it takes to be successful in such sectors. They are an inspiration for thousands of other women.

People who claim that these jobs are not suitable for women are only seeing one side of the coin. They are undermining the contributions of scores of women who proved that sky is the limit.

To conclude, nothing is impossible if one is determined to pursue one’s goals.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, likewise, nonetheless, so, therefore

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 13.1623246493 160% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 7.85571142285 25% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 7.30460921844 164% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 24.0651302605 137% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 22.0 41.998997996 52% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1437.0 1615.20841683 89% => OK
No of words: 281.0 315.596192385 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.11387900356 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.09427095027 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.55458017387 2.80592935109 91% => OK
Unique words: 153.0 176.041082164 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.544483985765 0.561755894193 97% => OK
syllable_count: 444.6 506.74238477 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 5.43587174349 184% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.76152304609 21% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 16.0721442886 131% => OK
Sentence length: 13.0 20.2975951904 64% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 26.2503212376 49.4020404114 53% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 68.4285714286 106.682146367 64% => OK
Words per sentence: 13.380952381 20.7667163134 64% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.14285714286 7.06120827912 30% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.179060299392 0.244688304435 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0566957130378 0.084324248473 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.050382325021 0.0667982634062 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0874254039311 0.151304729494 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.056631010139 0.056905535591 100% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.3 13.0946893788 71% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 58.28 50.2224549098 116% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 11.3001002004 74% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.77 12.4159519038 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.99 8.58950901804 93% => OK
difficult_words: 66.0 78.4519038076 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 9.78957915832 61% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.2 10.1190380762 71% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.7795591182 74% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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