Some countries encourage teenagers to have part time job and see it as a good thing while others disagree Give your opinion and explain both views

Grammar and spelling errors:
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...ed before the conclusion is reached. It is believed that occupying in part-ti...
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...velopments in teenagers lives. This can enhances many skills such as interpersonal skill...
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Suggestion: Similarly,
...ble background for their future career. Similarly important, most of the students have di...
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...ositive ramifications for teenagers. On the other hand, it is believed that t...
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...ces. Thus, it is unfolded that teenagers working is not a rational decision. ...
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... working is not a rational decision. To sum up, although many great advantage...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, consequently, if, similarly, so, thus, well, while, in addition, such as, as well as, to sum up, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 13.1623246493 152% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 36.0 24.0651302605 150% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 26.0 41.998997996 62% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1571.0 1615.20841683 97% => OK
No of words: 290.0 315.596192385 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.41724137931 5.12529762239 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.12666770723 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.06792117062 2.80592935109 109% => OK
Unique words: 155.0 176.041082164 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.534482758621 0.561755894193 95% => OK
syllable_count: 486.0 506.74238477 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 5.43587174349 166% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 60.0059520857 49.4020404114 121% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.214285714 106.682146367 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.7142857143 20.7667163134 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.57142857143 7.06120827912 121% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.01903807615 120% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.121813397043 0.244688304435 50% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0515510072226 0.084324248473 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0421173824322 0.0667982634062 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0825388231071 0.151304729494 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0313626890706 0.056905535591 55% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.5 13.0946893788 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.72 50.2224549098 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.16 12.4159519038 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.98 8.58950901804 105% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 78.4519038076 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.5 9.78957915832 128% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.

Teenagers are liked in each countries because they are capitals of the whole country. They are fuel providers to the country. They are energetic, hard worker, broad mind, supporter and inventor. They can do whatever they want because of having ability in teen age.
I strongly believe that its beneficial for teenagers to have part-time job to earn more even with their monthly income, which is only fixed by month. I mean to say that not everyone gets part-time job, sometimes part-time job takes time and becomes more difficult to get.
I tend to think that the people disagree to have part-time job because of already working in the official environment. To make it clear, If anyone is working in a circle of Graphic Designing so probably he wouldn’t want to have part-time job because of already doing the same faculty job.
It seems to me, some countries encourage teenagers to have part-time job and see it as a good thing maybe because of looking their energetic people in that country. On the other hand, not in every country people are active and energetic. It basically depends on their diet and daily routine, they keep on doing hard work since childhood so they are used to their environment and daily routine of work.
To summarize the topic, Its beneficial for teenagers to have part-time job to earn more even with their monthly income, which is only fixed by month. The people disagree to have part-time job because of already working in the official environment. Some countries encourage teenagers to have part-time job and see it as a good thing maybe because of looking their energetic people in that country.