In some countries, an increasing number of people are suffering from health problems as a result of eating too much fast food. It is, therefore, necessary for governments to impose a higher tax on this kind of food.To what extent do you agree or disagree

It is argued that government should highly tax the junk food industry which is evidently proven to be the main reason of causing serious health issues. This essay agrees that fast food companies should be taxed. The essay will first talk about the practice of similar penalization tax on other unhealthy food like alcohol and cigarette and then discuss how the consumption of junk food would be diminished eventually by imposing high tax on the industry.

The unhealthy food industry should be penalized in the form of tax like alcohol and cigarette. The raised tax could be used for educating people about the knowledge of healthy food since education is universally agreed as the most effective way as conscience people with enough healthy food knowledge can choose what they should eat by themselves. For example, a recent study from Oxford University in 2014 reported that 35% of people were more aware of the risk of cigarette than before the tax was increased as the government enhanced the education about the importance of healthy food at the same time.

The consumption of junk food would drop significantly after higher tax was introduced into the industry. According to the laws of economics, the higher the cost of the commodity, the less the consumption of the product and it will lead to the decrease of consumption of junk food eventually. For instance, The Time reported that 62% of people would consider to eat less of fast food if its price increased by only 10%.

In conclusion, this essay agrees the fast food business should be highly taxed so as to reflect the negative influential effects on human health just like cigarette and alcohol; as a result, the consumption of junk food will eventually drop because of economic reason and healthy knowledge consciousness.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 96, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...form of tax like alcohol and cigarette. The raised tax could be used for educating ...
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Line 5, column 350, Rule ID: ADMIT_ENJOY_VB[3]
Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'consider eating'.
Suggestion: consider eating
... Time reported that 62% of people would consider to eat less of fast food if its price increase...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 80, Rule ID: SO_AS_TO[1]
Message: Use simply 'to'
Suggestion: to
...st food business should be highly taxed so as to reflect the negative influential effect...
^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, if, so, then, as to, for example, for instance, in conclusion, as a result

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 7.85571142285 165% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 11.0 24.0651302605 46% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 41.998997996 110% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.3376753507 156% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1500.0 1615.20841683 93% => OK
No of words: 299.0 315.596192385 95% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.01672240803 5.12529762239 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.1583189471 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71175386421 2.80592935109 97% => OK
Unique words: 147.0 176.041082164 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.491638795987 0.561755894193 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 460.8 506.74238477 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 9.0 2.52805611222 356% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 16.0721442886 62% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 29.0 20.2975951904 143% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 78.6616170696 49.4020404114 159% => OK
Chars per sentence: 150.0 106.682146367 141% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.9 20.7667163134 144% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.1 7.06120827912 115% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.275382367593 0.244688304435 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.127634335862 0.084324248473 151% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.035984495636 0.0667982634062 54% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.179205925052 0.151304729494 118% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0160618868069 0.056905535591 28% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.2 13.0946893788 131% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.5 50.2224549098 101% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 11.3001002004 119% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.43 12.4159519038 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.51 8.58950901804 99% => OK
difficult_words: 65.0 78.4519038076 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.6 10.1190380762 134% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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