In some countries young people are encouraged to work or travel for a year between finishing high school and starting university studies Discuss the advantages and disadvantages for young people who decide to do this

It is generally accepted that education is the key of success which is more valuable in present century. However, it is argued that teenagers are motivated to work as well as visiting outside for a year when they complete high school and start University studies in many countries. In my point of view it has number of merits but demerits also which will be discussed in upcoming paragraphs.

On the one hand, if a positive side is analysed that students can get time for recreating themselves after completing primary education because of a burden of subjects. Moreover, it can help young people to decide what should they do for their future. Additionaly, by travelling students can know about the world's preference which will increase them to decide something new and important, while they can get well plan ideas and experience of works.

On the other hand, if adults take a gap in their education, it can have negative impacts on their future because some students can choose wrong path of life due to work or travel outside. For instance, a recent survey has proven that the students who do not continue their study are less conscious regarding their study due to having interest in other task which they have observed from different people and Nations, as a result,it can become major reason to get failure.

To conclude, I personally believe that students should be encouraged to focus on achievable goals according to their own interest instead of work or travel.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, moreover, regarding, so, well, while, for instance, as a result, as well as, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 24.0651302605 104% => OK
Preposition: 34.0 41.998997996 81% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1232.0 1615.20841683 76% => OK
No of words: 250.0 315.596192385 79% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.928 5.12529762239 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.97635364384 4.20363070211 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.60645352922 2.80592935109 93% => OK
Unique words: 154.0 176.041082164 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.616 0.561755894193 110% => OK
syllable_count: 387.9 506.74238477 77% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 16.0721442886 56% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 20.2975951904 133% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 57.2559770992 49.4020404114 116% => OK
Chars per sentence: 136.888888889 106.682146367 128% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.7777777778 20.7667163134 134% => OK
Discourse Markers: 13.1111111111 7.06120827912 186% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.228179875095 0.244688304435 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0913145802972 0.084324248473 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0836060359778 0.0667982634062 125% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.12172446358 0.151304729494 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0328960601314 0.056905535591 58% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.7 13.0946893788 120% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.07 50.2224549098 88% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 11.3001002004 122% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.61 12.4159519038 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.95 8.58950901804 104% => OK
difficult_words: 63.0 78.4519038076 80% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.1190380762 126% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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