International aid, such as Red Cross, plays a significant role in funding people in need when suffering from natrual disasters. Frequently people see celebraties contribute to charity organization. As a response from ordinary people to this phenomenon, some people believe that famous people's contribution to international aid organizations encourages more people to donate money; whereas, others think this deliberated show discourages people's enthusiasm in charity. In my opinion, celebrites'envolvement in charity work attracts people's attention and wields a positive influence.
To begin with, videos that show celebrities contribute to charity organizations amplify the influence and encourage people to donate for charity. Famous people are known to others and their participation in charity will exhibit as a model for people to donate to charity. For example, after the 8.1 magnitute earthqueak in 2008, celebrities in China hosted a live show and donated their contribution to the Red Cross, which substantially encouraged Chinese people to donate money to the Red Cross and other charity organizations. Thus, celebrities' donations to charity organizations have a positive influence on people and problems.
Nonetheless, others think this approach will result in opposite direction. People believe that celebrities would mitigate the severity of problem and discourage people's intention to donate to charity organizations. Due to the nature of entertainment industry, people see celebrities as a sterotype of less serious. For instance, celebrities frequently show carelessness on normal life and contempt the living of ordinary people. A celebrity in China did not finish his secondary education and do not know how to take a bus. Therefore, some people believe that celebrities are merely performing a show without showing compassion for people who is suffering.
To recapitulate, people's opinions toward the phenomenon that celebriites donate money to charity organizations in TV and Internet diverted. Personally, I think celebrities' participation in charity would encourage people and their action should be encouraged.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, nonetheless, second, so, therefore, thus, whereas, for example, for instance, i think, such as, in my opinion, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 13.1623246493 30% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 14.0 24.0651302605 58% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 41.998997996 107% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 8.3376753507 180% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1833.0 1615.20841683 113% => OK
No of words: 311.0 315.596192385 99% => OK
Chars per words: 5.89389067524 5.12529762239 115% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.19942759058 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.37948087973 2.80592935109 120% => OK
Unique words: 160.0 176.041082164 91% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.514469453376 0.561755894193 92% => OK
syllable_count: 593.1 506.74238477 117% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.9 1.60771543086 118% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 5.43587174349 18% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.384769539078 0% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.8855485613 49.4020404114 109% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.5625 106.682146367 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.4375 20.7667163134 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.3125 7.06120827912 118% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.01903807615 120% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.332826345062 0.244688304435 136% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.128574906206 0.084324248473 152% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0705705822127 0.0667982634062 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.226385224312 0.151304729494 150% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0566889540993 0.056905535591 100% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.0 13.0946893788 122% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 26.81 50.2224549098 53% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 11.3001002004 126% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 16.88 12.4159519038 136% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.35 8.58950901804 109% => OK
difficult_words: 94.0 78.4519038076 120% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 9.78957915832 133% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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