Some people believe that team sports are very important for children to succeed in their career, others disagree. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

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Some people believe that team sports are very important for children to succeed in their career, others disagree. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

Whether or not team sports contribute to a successful career is becoming increasingly controversial. While some people think that team sport is vital for a child to succeed in his career, others maintain that team spot is not attributed to a successful career in children. In my opinion, I believe that team sports are crucial for children to have a fulfilling career. This essay will discuss both views in-depth and I will give reasons why I support the former.

There is a growing number of people who think that team sports are important in harnessing a child’s potentials towards having a successful and fulfilling career path. For example, team sport helps children to become a good team player at work. Any child who understands that he wins when his team wins will adapt very quickly in the corporate world. I strongly support this view because having a successful career means working with other people who share the same vision and mission. Therefore, team sports are a vital tool for having a successful career.

In contrast to the number of people who maintain that team sports are important in developing a successful career, are the other people who do not agree with this view. This is because sports, in general, can cause fatigue in children. Take, for instance, a child who’s tired after performing some sporting activities will find it hard to study and concentrate in the classroom. This will ultimately cause them to lose focus on their career path.

To conclude, while a lot of people think that team spots are crucial in children to succeed in their career, others think that it will rather cause them to lose focus in their career path. I am a strong believer that team sports are a major driving force to having a successful career.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 1, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Whether” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
Whether or not team sports contribute to a succ...
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Line 1, column 1, Rule ID: WHETHER[7]
Message: Perhaps you can shorten this phrase to just 'Whether'. It is correct though if you mean 'regardless of whether'.
Suggestion: Whether
Whether or not team sports contribute to a successful ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, so, therefore, while, for example, for instance, in contrast, in general, in contrast to, in my opinion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 10.4138276553 48% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 16.0 7.30460921844 219% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 30.0 24.0651302605 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 34.0 41.998997996 81% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 8.3376753507 12% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1483.0 1615.20841683 92% => OK
No of words: 302.0 315.596192385 96% => OK
Chars per words: 4.91059602649 5.12529762239 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.1687104957 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.60817033946 2.80592935109 93% => OK
Unique words: 138.0 176.041082164 78% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.456953642384 0.561755894193 81% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 435.6 506.74238477 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.60771543086 87% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.3131133338 49.4020404114 84% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.8666666667 106.682146367 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.1333333333 20.7667163134 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.2 7.06120827912 102% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.411243974087 0.244688304435 168% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.156560913466 0.084324248473 186% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0875480760563 0.0667982634062 131% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.288010095695 0.151304729494 190% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0838950859778 0.056905535591 147% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.8 13.0946893788 90% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 68.1 50.2224549098 136% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 11.3001002004 77% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.2 12.4159519038 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.45 8.58950901804 87% => OK
difficult_words: 54.0 78.4519038076 69% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 9.78957915832 107% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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