Some people think that art is an essential subject for children at school while others think that it is a waste of time.
Discuss both sides and give your own opinion.
In Kazakhstan, there is a concern in society about the importance of art subjects since they occupy more than twenty five percent of the time children spend studying at school. Some teachers think that these disciplines are critical to teach at school while others claim that they are non-productive. This essay agrees with the idea that art should be made redundant in school program for the following reasons.
The main reason why I think that art subjects are not beneficial for schoolchildren is that there are more important subjects to study. After the graduation from school, many young people get employed as engineers, economists, and lawyers. Therefore, while they are at school, they should be studying more necessary subjects, including maths, physics and history, than music and literature, which are useless to their future career prospects. For example, as part of experiment, some schools, in Karaganda city, substituted art disciplines with vocational subjects to see how fast the students could find occupations when they left school. The result exceeded their expectancy because they had better qualifications than those students with no change in their curriculum.
However, some teachers state that it is necessary for children to study art at school. By studying art subjects, children would learn to appreciate the beauty of the world. If art is removed from school syllabus, then pupils will be unaware of beautiful pictures, songs and theater plays. Consequently, they will feel inferior to those who study art as an extra-curriculum activity. For example, in the former USSR, because they had not been taught art at school, many students found it unpleasantly difficult to answer the questions of art, which students from the USA as.
In conclusion, although art is essential in life, students can learn it separately from other subjects. I think that pupils should not study art and concentrate more on other subjects, such as physics and maths, because these disciplines can improve their career prospects.
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Suggestion:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, however, if, so, then, therefore, while, for example, i think, in conclusion, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 24.0651302605 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 39.0 41.998997996 93% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1721.0 1615.20841683 107% => OK
No of words: 323.0 315.596192385 102% => OK
Chars per words: 5.32817337461 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.23936324884 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.82439832374 2.80592935109 101% => OK
Unique words: 174.0 176.041082164 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.538699690402 0.561755894193 96% => OK
syllable_count: 504.9 506.74238477 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 8.0 2.10420841683 380% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.919697171 49.4020404114 81% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.733333333 106.682146367 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.5333333333 20.7667163134 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.6 7.06120827912 93% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.285782513588 0.244688304435 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.107281033854 0.084324248473 127% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0634027148329 0.0667982634062 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.187617032897 0.151304729494 124% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.050391552834 0.056905535591 89% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.4 13.0946893788 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 50.2224549098 100% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.63 12.4159519038 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.25 8.58950901804 96% => OK
difficult_words: 73.0 78.4519038076 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 9.78957915832 107% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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