Some people think it is more important to spend time in developing a successful career while others think it is more important to spend time with friends and family.
Discuss both sides and give your opinion.
There is no doubt that time management is a pivotal factor to be considered. While some people believe that the majority of time should be spent on improving their careers, others argue that giving more time to the family is much more important. I tend to agree with the latter opinion for several reasons.
On the one hand, perhaps if people spend a lot of time and effort in building successful careers, they will hopefully have higher income, because of their experience and professional skills. As a result, they not only can provide higher living conditions to their families, but also can be role models for their children. For example, a father who works as a successful business man can buy luxurious house for his family, and can give his kids the opportunity to get better higher education. This can lead his kids to be proud of him, which mainly gives a meaning for his life.
On the other hand, spending more time with family and friends can make stronger social bounds, which is as essential factor of happiness. To explain, the more activities and events that parents spend with their children will significantly make their relationship closer. it is a natural result for creating memorable moments that can have assiduous impact on children' characters and attitudes. As they can feel sported and protected by their parents' presence, which leads to self confidence. A recent study by the American Association of social studies showed that 80% of minors who have speech retardation and low self-esteem were mostly raised in a dual-income family in which both parents works for long hours.
In conclusion, in spite of the social and economic advantages of focusing in most of the time on boosting successful careers, it is way more important to give the majority of time to socialize with friends and family, as happiness and personal development depend generally on such relationships.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 9, column 272, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: It
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, so, while, for example, in conclusion, no doubt, as a result, in spite of, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 7.30460921844 164% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 24.0651302605 104% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 41.998997996 90% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1596.0 1615.20841683 99% => OK
No of words: 318.0 315.596192385 101% => OK
Chars per words: 5.01886792453 5.12529762239 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.22286093782 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71007157754 2.80592935109 97% => OK
Unique words: 174.0 176.041082164 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.547169811321 0.561755894193 97% => OK
syllable_count: 495.0 506.74238477 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 62.2227341014 49.4020404114 126% => OK
Chars per sentence: 122.769230769 106.682146367 115% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.4615384615 20.7667163134 118% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.23076923077 7.06120827912 117% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.264029812665 0.244688304435 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0941174552476 0.084324248473 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0982685073028 0.0667982634062 147% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.184392838034 0.151304729494 122% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.082894316411 0.056905535591 146% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.4 13.0946893788 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 50.2224549098 94% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.13 12.4159519038 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.75 8.58950901804 102% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 78.4519038076 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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