It is argued that trend of depending on each other has increased with modernization. However, an opposing view claims that people are actively achieving independence with advancing time. Although both sides have convincing arguments, I believe that individuals have become less reliable on each than ancient times.
One reason people proclaim that dependency has increased as compared to past times is rapid globalization. This means a rise in communication among masses from various parts of world has led to lives becoming massively intertwined. Hence, people look up to one another to fulfill their basic needs. Trade of food supplies, for instance, has risen tremendously in recent decade due to better command over land and sea routes. Consequently, many people are dependent on imported vegetables and fruits harvested by masses from far-off countries in order to cater their dietary requirements. Another form of dependency has descended on modern humans in the form of economic reliability. With an improvement in life expectancy due to breakthroughs in medical sciences proportion of older population has increased remarkably. Since this fraction of population does not remain capable of staying in workforce, they have to rely on younger generation for financial support. Moreover, a rise in population of children due to decline in infant mortality has also added to ratio of dependency group.
However, in my opinion, these arguments do not live up to the scrutiny and individual independence is rampant in current era. To begin with, joint family system has plummeted significantly over the years as more people are moving out of their parental homes. These individuals not only buy separate residential places to live but also strive to achieve financial independence in order to design their lives according to their own choices. Moreover, with modernization younger age groups are entering into work force to accomplish financial self-sufficiency. In America, for instance, lower age limit of most entry level employees has decreased to an average sixteen years in last five years as compared to eighteen years before that. In addition to this, the concepts of privacy and interpersonal space have recently become popular among adolescents and middle-aged population leading to a more independent model of society.
To sum it up, Some people insist modernization has led to a rise in dependency as compared to ancient times but reality is quite opposite. I strongly believe social development has paved a way to sheer independence of population and only time will tell whether it is a positive development.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 195, Rule ID: TO_NON_BASE[1]
Message: The verb after "to" should be in the base form: 'live'.
Suggestion: live
... from various parts of world has led to lives becoming massively intertwined. Hence, ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, hence, however, if, look, moreover, so, for instance, in addition, in my opinion, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 7.85571142285 13% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 22.0 24.0651302605 91% => OK
Preposition: 81.0 41.998997996 193% => OK
Nominalization: 23.0 8.3376753507 276% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2215.0 1615.20841683 137% => OK
No of words: 411.0 315.596192385 130% => OK
Chars per words: 5.38929440389 5.12529762239 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.50256981431 4.20363070211 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.0718472204 2.80592935109 109% => OK
Unique words: 241.0 176.041082164 137% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.586374695864 0.561755894193 104% => OK
syllable_count: 724.5 506.74238477 143% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.60771543086 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.76152304609 168% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 16.0721442886 124% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 30.8609785976 49.4020404114 62% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.75 106.682146367 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.55 20.7667163134 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.0 7.06120827912 85% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 3.4128256513 234% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.194832806564 0.244688304435 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0544299048691 0.084324248473 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0445623414993 0.0667982634062 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.119538633226 0.151304729494 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0475973192979 0.056905535591 84% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.2 13.0946893788 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 34.26 50.2224549098 68% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.5 11.3001002004 119% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.98 12.4159519038 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.55 8.58950901804 111% => OK
difficult_words: 128.0 78.4519038076 163% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 9.78957915832 77% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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