Some people think that more money should be spent on protecting endangered species while others think it is a waste of valuable money.What is your opinion?

Authorities have taken fiscal measures to protect endangered animals from becoming extinct. But, some of us think that this expenditure is a wastage of money. This essay agrees that extinction is a nature’s cycle of evolution. Instead of spending on preserving endangered species, this money can be utilized to deal with current social issues and to fund for future scientific researches.

Poverty, hunger and inadequate living conditions are few social issues which need prior attention by concerned authorities. Around 30 % of folks in third-world countries, like India and Africa, are deprived of basic living standards. They strive to earn a meal. If proper consideration is made and adequate financial measures are taken, then these individuals are provided with such necessities.

Furthermore, every year various scientific researches and inventions are conducted to make human life as easy as possible. However, these researches need good investment of time and money. For an instance, scientists have been researching and developing new technologies to decrease the water pollution in various water bodies like oceans, seas and rivers. This, not only provides existing species, including human beings, a healthier environment to live in, but also, opens a breeding ground for upcoming new species. Investing money in dealing with such environmental issues would benefit all living beings on this earth.

To sum up, government’s monetary aid should not be wasted in disturbing the nature’s evolution cycle. Rather, it should be used to provide basic living standards to underprivileged individuals and also to fund scientific researches and inventions carried out to address current major environmental issues.

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IELTS Writing Task II - IELTS General Training

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 171, Rule ID: AGREE_WITH_THE_FACT[1]
Message: Use simply 'agree that'.
Suggestion: agree that
...iture is a wastage of money. This essay agree with the fact that extinction is a nature's cycle of ...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 384, Rule ID: BASIC_FUNDAMENTALS[1]
Message: Use simply 'necessities'.
Suggestion: necessities
...hese individuals are provided with such basic necessities. Furthermore, every year various sc...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 113, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Rather,
...bing the nature's evolution cycle. Rather it should be used to provide basic livi...
^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, however, if, so, then, third, to sum up

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 7.30460921844 41% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 12.0 24.0651302605 50% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 41.998997996 88% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1497.0 1615.20841683 93% => OK
No of words: 263.0 315.596192385 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.69201520913 5.12529762239 111% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.02706775958 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.11907611156 2.80592935109 111% => OK
Unique words: 175.0 176.041082164 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.665399239544 0.561755894193 118% => OK
syllable_count: 460.8 506.74238477 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.60771543086 112% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 56.9690043411 49.4020404114 115% => OK
Chars per sentence: 115.153846154 106.682146367 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.2307692308 20.7667163134 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.84615384615 7.06120827912 69% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.135120717758 0.244688304435 55% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0488117787947 0.084324248473 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0615215321009 0.0667982634062 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0788429650995 0.151304729494 52% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.062830557971 0.056905535591 110% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.5 13.0946893788 118% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 34.26 50.2224549098 68% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.5 11.3001002004 119% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.72 12.4159519038 127% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.91 8.58950901804 115% => OK
difficult_words: 88.0 78.4519038076 112% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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