Some people like to travel outside their country.Others would rather travel to tourist spots in their own country first,before travelling abroad. Which do you prefer to do and why? Include specific details and examples to support your choice.
Over the past few decades the international tourism industry has gone through boom period. Cheap air travel, in particular,has allowed ordinary working class people to travel to more international destinations than ever before.In this essay,I shall refer to a number of sociological studies to show why contrary to popular opinion-domestic travel should initially take precedence over international travel.
To begin with people's knowledge of their own country and culture has grown increasingly sketchy.This is largely because foreign brands, television shows and cultural objects flood local markets. For example , the Asian cultural society found that Japanese teenagers knew more about American television series than 19th Century Japanese woodcuts. It should ,therefore, be clear that citizens need to know much more about their own countries, and that visit to local cultural clubs should occur before visit to other countries.
Secondly, people reap high economic benefits if they are well-traveled in their native countries.This is because local travel, particular opens up business opportunities.For example, the Korean Society for Entrepreneurship found that 40% of successful start-up companies run by individuals who have traveled excessively in Korea and sniffed out small openings in developmentally neglected areas. Seen in this light, local travel can also be a vital economic significance.
To conclude,although few may argue outright against foreign travel, there are certainly reasons why domestic travel is initially preferable. In the future, as some of the hype surrounding foreign travel dies down , these reasons will no doubt appear more attractive and conspicuous.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, if, may, second, secondly, so, therefore, well, for example, in particular, no doubt, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 13.1623246493 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 10.4138276553 48% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 15.0 24.0651302605 62% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 41.998997996 86% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.3376753507 24% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1456.0 1615.20841683 90% => OK
No of words: 246.0 315.596192385 78% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.91869918699 5.12529762239 115% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.96035189615 4.20363070211 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.22209463867 2.80592935109 115% => OK
Unique words: 172.0 176.041082164 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.69918699187 0.561755894193 124% => OK
syllable_count: 448.2 506.74238477 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.60771543086 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 16.0721442886 56% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 20.2975951904 133% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 98.5484777616 49.4020404114 199% => OK
Chars per sentence: 161.777777778 106.682146367 152% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.3333333333 20.7667163134 132% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.6666666667 7.06120827912 165% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 12.0 5.01903807615 239% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.67935871743 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.230060991107 0.244688304435 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0863931542335 0.084324248473 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0547156689283 0.0667982634062 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.132867825411 0.151304729494 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0273983065197 0.056905535591 48% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 20.1 13.0946893788 153% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 27.15 50.2224549098 54% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 16.2 11.3001002004 143% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 17.35 12.4159519038 140% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.43 8.58950901804 121% => OK
difficult_words: 85.0 78.4519038076 108% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 16.0 9.78957915832 163% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.1190380762 126% => OK
text_standard: 16.0 10.7795591182 148% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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More content wanted.
Minimum 250 words wanted.
Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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