Some say that the government should stop supporting the professional sports activities and the cultural performances, and instead begin supporting schools to encourage children to take up sports and arts. What is your opinion?
A large proportion of a nation's budget is allocated to support athletes and cultural performers. However, some people believe that the government should stop spending for these activities, instead focus on supporting schools and encourage students to take up sports and arts. I strongly agree with this argument for three main reasons.
Firstly, the expenditures to support professional athletes and cultural performers is tremendously expensive. They can bring honor to their country, only a small number of people benefit from it. For example, supporting athletes in international completion costs an arm and a leg even if the chance of getting the trophy is very slim.
Conversely, it is not necessary for a country to join all kinds of sports and arts competition as they are not really a big deal for a nation’s pride. On the other hand, it would be most beneficial if the government use their money in providing and developing gyms and theater stages in schools as this is a sure guarantee of a fun and productive experience for all students.
Lastly, if the government focus more on promoting sports and arts in schools, majority of the students will be able to develop self-confidence that can definitely help them once they graduate and start working. It will also help a number of students who are struggling with pear pressure, doing bad vices. These subjects will divert their attentions especially they now have places and activities to do during their free time.
To conclude, supporting professional sports and cultural performances is a very expensive and not always an assurance that they will bring pride to one's nation. It would rather be best to support the young students since they hold their country's future success.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, use 'a few', or use 'some'
Suggestion: a few; some
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Message: Did you mean 'one's'?
Suggestion: one's
...assurance that they will bring pride to ones nation. It would rather be best to supp...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, conversely, first, firstly, however, if, lastly, really, so, for example, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 10.4138276553 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 25.0 24.0651302605 104% => OK
Preposition: 30.0 41.998997996 71% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1473.0 1615.20841683 91% => OK
No of words: 286.0 315.596192385 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.15034965035 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.11236361783 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.90455073697 2.80592935109 104% => OK
Unique words: 168.0 176.041082164 95% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.587412587413 0.561755894193 105% => OK
syllable_count: 444.6 506.74238477 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.0199662616 49.4020404114 97% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.307692308 106.682146367 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.0 20.7667163134 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.46153846154 7.06120827912 106% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.67935871743 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.2408781216 0.244688304435 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0851819263941 0.084324248473 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.108493740942 0.0667982634062 162% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.138002356469 0.151304729494 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.105604017079 0.056905535591 186% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.8 13.0946893788 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 50.2224549098 98% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.59 12.4159519038 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.48 8.58950901804 99% => OK
difficult_words: 68.0 78.4519038076 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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