Some say that the government should stop supporting the professional sports activities and the cultural performances, and instead begin supporting schools to encourage children to take up sports and arts. What is your opinion?
A large proportion of a nation's budget is allocated to support athletes and cultural performers. However, some people believe that the government should stop spending for these activities, instead focus on supporting schools and encourage students to take up sports and arts. I strongly agree with this argument for three main reasons.
Firstly, the expenditures to support professional athletes and cultural performers is expensive. Undoubtedly, they can bring honor to their country and only few people benefit from it. For example, supporting athletes in international competition costs an arm and a leg. Thus, chances of getting the trophy is very slim.
Conversely, it is not necessary for a country to join all kinds of sports and arts competition as they are not really a big deal for a nation’s pride. On the other hand, it would be most beneficial if the government use their money in providing and developing gyms and theater stages in schools which will surely lead to fun and productive experience for all students.
Lastly, if the government focus more on promoting sports and arts in schools, majority of the students will be able to develop self-confidence and can definitely help them once they graduate and start working. Also, it help some of students who are struggling with pear pressure, doing bad vices. These subjects can divert their attentions for now they have places and activities to do during free time.
To conclude, supporting professional sports and cultural performances is a very hefty and not always assure they will bring pride to one's nation. It would rather be best to support the young students since they hold their country's future success.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, conversely, first, firstly, however, if, lastly, really, so, thus, for example, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 10.4138276553 154% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 7.30460921844 41% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 21.0 24.0651302605 87% => OK
Preposition: 29.0 41.998997996 69% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1424.0 1615.20841683 88% => OK
No of words: 274.0 315.596192385 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.19708029197 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.0685311056 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.86224474654 2.80592935109 102% => OK
Unique words: 165.0 176.041082164 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.602189781022 0.561755894193 107% => OK
syllable_count: 426.6 506.74238477 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.0697801932 49.4020404114 103% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.714285714 106.682146367 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.5714285714 20.7667163134 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.35714285714 7.06120827912 104% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 8.67935871743 150% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.247210649949 0.244688304435 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0834068977407 0.084324248473 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.10611395754 0.0667982634062 159% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.142002797798 0.151304729494 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.102959273492 0.056905535591 181% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 13.0946893788 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 50.2224549098 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.88 12.4159519038 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.38 8.58950901804 98% => OK
difficult_words: 66.0 78.4519038076 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 9.78957915832 72% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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