Some young people have free time in the evenings after school or on days off from school. Which of the
following activities would be most beneficial for young people (ages 14-18) to do in their spare time?
Why?
- Gaining practical work experience either at a part time job or by volunteering in the community
-Learning to play a sport
- Learning to play a musical instrument
In my point of view, definitely, young students should balance their free time. By this I mean that these three ideas might be helpful for them. Although, I think that gaining work experience might be even more useful for their future than others.
As I told before, I believe that young people should spend their free times learning to play a sport and a musical instrument. Even if I believe that these ideas are not useless at all, indeed, I’d argue that gaining some work experience is crutial for their career in future. So, being a volunteer in some institution or get a part-time job will, in fact, help them how to being responsible with their time or behavior. Then, for instance, they will learn correct behavior in business environment and how to handle office’s issues, how to run a business and hot to talk to a client.
Otherwise, I would argue that it’s important, especially, for teenagers to learn how to play some sports or some instruments. So, there is a tendency to believe that career is most important part of their lives, but I think that they should be encouraged to develop their artistic skills as well. Learning how to play piano or tennis, such as, is, definitely, not a waste of time. In fact, this might benefit their personal lives, personality and, mainly, their relationships as well.
Therefore, despite what I think about this. I mean, teenagers spending their free times learning how to play some instrument or sports, I truly would say that having experience as a volunteer would help them incredible more in their future lives.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 243, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... argue that gaining some work experience is crutial for their career in future. S...
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Line 3, column 273, Rule ID: IN_PAST[1]
Message: Did you mean: 'in the future'?
Suggestion: in the future
...experience is crutial for their career in future. So, being a volunteer in some institut...
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Line 3, column 465, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to correct'
Suggestion: to correct
...r. Then, for instance, they will learn correct behavior in business environment and ho...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, so, then, therefore, well, for instance, i mean, i think, in fact, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 42.0 24.0651302605 175% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 28.0 41.998997996 67% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1322.0 1615.20841683 82% => OK
No of words: 271.0 315.596192385 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.87822878229 5.12529762239 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.05734859645 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.63866279766 2.80592935109 94% => OK
Unique words: 145.0 176.041082164 82% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.535055350554 0.561755894193 95% => OK
syllable_count: 395.1 506.74238477 78% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.761960816 49.4020404114 91% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.692307692 106.682146367 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.8461538462 20.7667163134 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.38461538462 7.06120827912 90% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.259136859039 0.244688304435 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0988960733589 0.084324248473 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0631656057877 0.0667982634062 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.174468135161 0.151304729494 115% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0460760404843 0.056905535591 81% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.0 13.0946893788 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 50.2224549098 119% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.3001002004 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.02 12.4159519038 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.83 8.58950901804 91% => OK
difficult_words: 55.0 78.4519038076 70% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 9.78957915832 77% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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