: Throughout the history, people dream to build a perfect society while they haven't agreed how the ideal society would be like. What is the most important element you think to make a perfect society? How do people do to achieve an ideal society？

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: Throughout the history, people dream to build a perfect society while they haven't agreed how the ideal society would be like. What is the most important element you think to make a perfect society? How do people do to achieve an ideal society？

Over centuries, human being has been searching for achieving perfection, although it would be uneasy to reach this dream, people are still hoping to live in a such circumstances.in my opinion there are uncountable elements which could lead to ideal society. Therefore I am going to summarize them and what should be done to fulfill the dream.

One of the main leading points is preserving human rights .these are many such as fair chance of education, employment and health services. So that everybody will feel secured an satisfied ,and this result in more loyalty towards the community. The way foreword is raise the infrastructure of health system ,make the education compulsory as well as feasible to access by the public and the government should invest more to provide more job opportunities. Consequently, these measures collectively lead to achieve the satisfaction of living.

Another important factor is building up a generation that are fortified by moral values like, loving, helping, respecting, avoid cheating lying among community. If all these values had been implanted earlier, we would have shorten the way to make our dream comes true.

Finally, safety and protection is what people always are looking for in their life because they would not have to worry about themselves, their relatives or their belongings. In other word they feel comfortable and unstressed .to acquire this environment, there should more laws that control and deter crimes and prevent offender from threatening society safety.

To sum up, Perfection is an aspect that needs a lot of changes and many factors are considered from respecting human rights, ensuring healthy generations are growing up and wrapping up people with safe .and unless some steps are held our dream will become out of reach.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, finally, if, look, so, still, therefore, well, such as, as well as, in my opinion, to sum up

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 13.1623246493 137% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 23.0 24.0651302605 96% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 41.998997996 86% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1516.0 1615.20841683 94% => OK
No of words: 288.0 315.596192385 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.26388888889 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.11953428781 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80024766045 2.80592935109 100% => OK
Unique words: 196.0 176.041082164 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.680555555556 0.561755894193 121% => OK
syllable_count: 464.4 506.74238477 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 20.2975951904 128% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 62.0722053554 49.4020404114 126% => OK
Chars per sentence: 137.818181818 106.682146367 129% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.1818181818 20.7667163134 126% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.63636363636 7.06120827912 136% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.01903807615 159% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.177470166593 0.244688304435 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0519990328171 0.084324248473 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0355117630072 0.0667982634062 53% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0830393216117 0.151304729494 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0406814133842 0.056905535591 71% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.4 13.0946893788 125% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.09 50.2224549098 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 11.3001002004 119% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.52 12.4159519038 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.64 8.58950901804 112% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 78.4519038076 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.1190380762 123% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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