: Today, the high sales of popular consumer goods reflect the power of advertising and not the real needs of the society in which they are sold .To what exrent do you agree or disagree?

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: Today, the high sales of popular consumer goods reflect the power of advertising and not the real needs of the society in which they are sold .
To what exrent do you agree or disagree?

Today’s world is a marketing world. Thus, it is considered that advertisement is th main reason behind sales hike of any famous product,irrespective of its need. In my opinion, I completely agree with this viewpoint because many times we buy things just because of advertisement without even realizing its usage for us.
To begin with , modern technology plays a pivotal role in increasing market because of advertisement.In contemporary world , almost every individual have access to the technology like internet , television and so on. These all act as medium for advertisement. Owing to this , advertising companies can cover more potion of consumers.For instance, if we take a case of a movie or any serial being telecasted on television, their twenty percent of time is devoted only to publication of products. Thus , excessive exposure to the technology will lead to sales hoist.
Furthermore, advertisement lure customer in a very creative way. Like, they offer some discounted rates if customer buy in bulk.Many a times people buy products in extra and land up throwing them at the end.They don’t realize that the actual cost at the end will come out on higher side if they buy extra owing to offers.To illustrate, people buy groceries in bulk and some of the products get expired .Thus, they have to dispose it. Also , sometimes companies hire celebrities to endorse their product.It would cause immense rise in sales because people idolises them .Foe example, in India sales of ‘ Boost energy drink ‘ shooted upto fourty percent after famous cricketer Sachin promote it. So, the creativity of advertisement allure more number of buyers.
In conclusion , this essay discussed the causes behind sales rise because of publication such as more exposure to technology and magnetic quality of broadcasting.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, furthermore, if, so, thus, for instance, in conclusion, such as, in my opinion, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 13.1623246493 38% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 10.4138276553 48% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 2.0 7.30460921844 27% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 25.0 24.0651302605 104% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 41.998997996 117% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1539.0 1615.20841683 95% => OK
No of words: 290.0 315.596192385 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.30689655172 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.12666770723 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.1209487792 2.80592935109 111% => OK
Unique words: 186.0 176.041082164 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.641379310345 0.561755894193 114% => OK
syllable_count: 504.9 506.74238477 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 5.43587174349 166% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 100.647176645 49.4020404114 204% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 128.25 106.682146367 120% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.1666666667 20.7667163134 116% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.25 7.06120827912 117% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 24.0 5.01903807615 478% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.4128256513 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.100263046966 0.244688304435 41% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0372215597832 0.084324248473 44% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0237488499159 0.0667982634062 36% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0581828377199 0.151304729494 38% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0328459128588 0.056905535591 58% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.7 13.0946893788 120% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 38.66 50.2224549098 77% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 11.3001002004 122% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.81 12.4159519038 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.35 8.58950901804 109% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 78.4519038076 106% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 9.78957915832 107% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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