You recently moved house and you used a removal company to help you move your belongings However some of your things were damaged in the move Write a letter to the manager of the removal company In your letter Give details of the move Describe the damage

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You recently moved house and you used a removal company to help you move your belongings.
However, some of your things were damaged in the move. Write a letter to the manager of the removal company.
In your letter •
Give details of the move •
Describe the damage •
Say what you would like the manager to do Write at least 150 words.
You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Dear Sir or Madam

I am Navdeep Puri, penning down this epistle to lodge a complaint regarding negligence in your services.As I have been transferred to the head quarters of my company at New York, so i have utilized your services to move my household belongings from Texas to New York on last Saturday.

As you have advertised about the perfection of your services, but there was no professionalism as all your staff is to be considered as novice.Owing to their reckless behavior, there are ample scratches on my newly bought furniture. My crockery has been pathetically damaged due to lack of experienced employees.

As per your legal contracts , it is unambiguously clear that all damage during transit is the responsibility of your company. Hence, it would be highly appreciable if you repair my belongings or compensate me with adequate amount of amount so that i can repair it.

I am anticipating a prompt response from your side.

Yours faithfully,
Navdeep Puri.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 18, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
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Dear Sir or Madam I am Navdeep Puri, penning down this epi...
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Suggestion: As
...t regarding negligence in your services.As I have been transferred to the head qua...
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Line 3, column 139, Rule ID: HEAD_QUARTERS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'headquarters'?
Suggestion: headquarters
...vices.As I have been transferred to the head quarters of my company at New York, so i have u...
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Line 3, column 189, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
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...ers of my company at New York, so i have utilized your services to move my househ...
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Line 5, column 113, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
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...was no professionalism as all your staff is to be considered as novice.Owing to ...
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...fessionalism as all your staff is to be considered as novice.Owing to their reck...
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...r staff is to be considered as novice.Owing to their reckless behavior, there are a...
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Line 6, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
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... due to lack of experienced employees. As per your legal contracts , it is unam...
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...ployees. As per your legal contracts , it is unambiguously clear that all dam...
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Line 7, column 56, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
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...al contracts , it is unambiguously clear that all damage during transit is the re...
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... with adequate amount of amount so that i can repair it. I am anticipating a p...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, hence, if, regarding, so, as to

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 7.85571142285 25% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 10.4138276553 29% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 2.0 7.30460921844 27% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 28.0 24.0651302605 116% => OK
Preposition: 23.0 41.998997996 55% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 2.0 8.3376753507 24% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 828.0 1615.20841683 51% => More number of characters wanted.
No of words: 162.0 315.596192385 51% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.11111111111 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.56762134501 4.20363070211 85% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.16030128853 2.80592935109 113% => OK
Unique words: 112.0 176.041082164 64% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.691358024691 0.561755894193 123% => OK
syllable_count: 257.4 506.74238477 51% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.76152304609 21% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 7.0 16.0721442886 44% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 93.0018652435 49.4020404114 188% => OK
Chars per sentence: 118.285714286 106.682146367 111% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.1428571429 20.7667163134 111% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.14285714286 7.06120827912 73% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 11.0 5.01903807615 219% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.67935871743 35% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.231942454026 0.244688304435 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0986877614457 0.084324248473 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0376557187199 0.0667982634062 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.121866125506 0.151304729494 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0264727711246 0.056905535591 47% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.2 13.0946893788 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 50.2224549098 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.65 12.4159519038 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.46 8.58950901804 110% => OK
difficult_words: 48.0 78.4519038076 61% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 19.0 9.78957915832 194% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Minimum 250 words wanted.

Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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