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It goes without saying the young strata in each community is the most important building blocks in that society, the role of whom is undeniable. However, due to the modernization and evolving of technology in an extreme manner, some people hold the opinion that young people do not give enough time and effort to help their communities. On the other hand, others stand at the other side of the continuum, believing that the new generation and younger people get out of their ways in order to be of assistant to their society. Personally speaking, I believe that youngster are of great help to their communities, and the reasons to substantiate my viewpoint are elaborated upon hereunder.
To begin with, there has been a revolutionary change in the state of the mind of young people thanks to the genesis of technology which has made the juveniles to be more open-minded and responsible toward their communities. It is crystal clear that with the advent of technology, humans' mindset has also enjoyed a great change making people to have a more profound understanding and vision to the issues present in their community. For instance, when a problem occurs in the society, through the use of social networking like Facebook, Instagram and the like, a new trend will be created by people in order to make the problem emphatic. Under such a circumstance, younger people do their best in order to be more involved and make themselves distinguished to the society. There are even times when today's generation sacrifice their desires and wants and totally ignore them just to be helpful to their society. If it was not for the help of young generation, the world would have not changed in such a swift pace.
Furthermore, young people consider themselves to be an indispensable part of the society which give rise to the importance of their responsibility. To put it in other words, the more a person consider him or herself responsible to a community, the more time and effort he or she will put to make their community flourish and prosper. Not only do the young consider themselves to be responsible for their community, but they also dedicate themselves to a great extent to the people of the society. An example can drive this notion home. I have recently read an international newspaper about the Palestinian war with Israel. What came as a shock to me was that the war has lasted for a quiet a few decades. Surprisingly enough, the writer of the news believed that if the younger people did not take the responsibility of fighting for their country, they would have been defeated years ago. The role of young people can be vividly crystalized in this short example that even under torture and excruciating situations, young people nowadays concern about their society and the problems occurring the community. No longer can people underestimate the role of the young people or stigmatize their importance in the way they put time and effort to help their communities.
In conclusion, on the basis of the aforementioned grounds and examples, I do believe that young people in this era pay enough attention to the community in which they live and spend a considerable amount of time helping their society alongside one another because they are both responsible and open-minded people.
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- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement Movies and television have more negative effects than positive effects on the way young people behave Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer 76
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- TOEFL Integrated: Altruism:Summarize the points made in the lecture you just heard, being sure to specifically explain how they cast doubt on points made in the reading 3
- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement Movies and television have more negative effects than positive effects on the way young people behave Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer 76
- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement Movies and television have more negative effects than positive effects on the way young people behave Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer 76
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 207, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in an extreme manner" with adverb for "extreme"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, however, if, so, for instance, in conclusion, in other words, to begin with, on the other hand, to a great extent
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 22.0 13.8261648746 159% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 52.0 43.0788530466 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 82.0 52.1666666667 157% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2734.0 1977.66487455 138% => OK
No of words: 556.0 407.700716846 136% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.91726618705 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.85588840946 4.48103885553 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.87970927904 2.67179642975 108% => OK
Unique words: 253.0 212.727598566 119% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.455035971223 0.524837075471 87% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 869.4 618.680645161 141% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 8.0 3.08781362007 259% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 27.0 20.1344086022 134% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 58.8038264061 48.9658058833 120% => OK
Chars per sentence: 136.7 100.406767564 136% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.8 20.6045352989 135% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.85 5.45110844103 126% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.236089414692 0% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.076458572812 0% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0737576698707 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.150856017488 0% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0645574589148 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.6 11.7677419355 133% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.07 58.1214874552 76% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 10.1575268817 136% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.55 10.9000537634 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.27 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 116.0 86.8835125448 134% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 10.002688172 145% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.0537634409 127% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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