#6 If you could change one important thing about your hometown, what would you change? Use reasons and specific examples to support your answer.

I live in a village of 20,000 population. Many people of different culture, religion and occupation live together happily. Our village head is good at his duties he has provided many facilities like current, roads, water and safety. Apparently no one will want to change anything in our village. But I can see a problem which will lead to problem in future. It is necessary to recognize today itself. Our village is surrounded by thick forest and a river. The increasing population needs space for people to live. many trees from the river bank are cutted down within last five years. This year it rained heavily and many soil and small trees were washed out with rainwater. it lead to erosion of soil. Cutting 100 year old trees resulted in soil erosion and increased pollution. Many people started to built their home is cultivable farm making it uncultivable for longer period. This should stop somewhere otherwise it may lead to seviour damage to society.
I would love to change this thing. By doing this we are contributing in global warming. To avoid this we need to run many awareness programmes. People should think about long term effects of of their doings. We can stop them form doing this but the main problem of space will remain as it is. So for that we have uncultivatable saline and arid land near village this should be made available for building homes. The trees over 100 yrs are our treasures we need ban to cut them. deforestation will cause drought condition affecting economy of villege. The programme of reforestation must be conducted to prevent further soil erosion. Increased soil erosion can cause flood situation. There is new technique to prevent soil erosion at the river banks. In this they build a stone wall covered and tied with metal wire. This can be temporary solution to prevent further erosion. But for long term solution we need to for plantation of perennial tress. Perennial trees live longer and they have capacity to survive minor climate changes.
Initially people will not agree for this so we need do case study first and show them proof about what we are trying to say. Then only they will believe in us. Without their support its very hard or we can say its nearly impossible to overcome this situation. For this we have to target youngsters. Everyone wants to live in better world where we can live peacefully for this people should come forward and help me in building better community with nature.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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...acity to survive minor climate changes. Initially people will not agree for this...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
apparently, but, first, if, may, so, then

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 23.0 9.8082437276 234% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 11.0286738351 27% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 54.0 43.0788530466 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 57.0 52.1666666667 109% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2030.0 1977.66487455 103% => OK
No of words: 424.0 407.700716846 104% => OK
Chars per words: 4.78773584906 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.53775939005 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.47018083201 2.67179642975 92% => OK
Unique words: 236.0 212.727598566 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.556603773585 0.524837075471 106% => OK
syllable_count: 634.5 618.680645161 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 34.0 20.6003584229 165% => OK
Sentence length: 12.0 20.1344086022 60% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 27.6553804748 48.9658058833 56% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 59.7058823529 100.406767564 59% => More chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 12.4705882353 20.6045352989 61% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.20588235294 5.45110844103 22% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.53405017921 66% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 8.0 5.5376344086 144% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 15.0 4.88709677419 307% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0372059922094 0.236089414692 16% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0128737232185 0.076458572812 17% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0422997330813 0.0737576698707 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0271247288044 0.150856017488 18% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0039517967607 0.0645574589148 6% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 7.4 11.7677419355 63% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 67.76 58.1214874552 117% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.8 10.1575268817 67% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.61 10.9000537634 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.51 8.01818996416 94% => OK
difficult_words: 88.0 86.8835125448 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 5.0 10.002688172 50% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 6.8 10.0537634409 68% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 10.247311828 68% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?

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Minimum four paragraphs wanted.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.

Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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