The ability to maintain friendships with a small number of people over a long period of time is ?more important for happiness than the ability to make many new friends easily.?
Friendship has a critical role in people's lives. Most of them think that it is better to have a small group of friend with a strong relationship, on the other hand, others believe that bigger circles of relationship can be more beneficial. In my opinion, I agree with the former one for a couple of reasons, which I explore in the following essay.
First, when you have a small number of people around, you are able to be familiar with them more easily. To be more specific, you may recognize all of their feature, characteristic, and even you can remember their birthday. While, you are in bigger, varied relation, there is a possibility that you can't recall their name sometime. My friend's story is a compelling fact about this. She works in a marketing company and she used to contact different people. In this regard, she has made a huge number of relations with different people. Last month was her husband's birthday, and she was so busy with her friends. She was so busy that it made here to forget his closest, dearest person. As you can see, if she were less distracted by her outer relation, she wouldn't make her husband upset.
Secondly, as you have a small group of friends, you are sure that all of them care about you. In other words, they belong to a group of close individuals who can help you anytime anywhere you need them. On the other side, I think that more the wider you friendship circles are, the more impassionate people are around. For example, I have a group of friends that contains just 5 people and we are so close to each other. Last year, I got cold in my house, and I was alone so that I couldn't pour a glass of water for myself. Then, I decided to call one of my friends. He was in my house in a fraction of a second. He took me to the hospital and he looked after me for five days. Otherwise, had I big contact list, I would have died to reach one of them. This example showed me an intimate close friend can help you in any situation which is causing your happiness.
In conclusion, I strongly agree that a close and small band of friends over a long period of time is more effective than a massive group of them. Not only can you know them well, but also you can be sure that they care about you.
- The ability to maintain friendships with a small number of people over a long period of time is ?more important for happiness than the ability to make many new friends easily.? 70
- Some parents offer their school-age children money for each high grade (mark) they get in school. Do you think this is a good idea? 76
- TPO 47 3
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 22, Rule ID: SMALL_NUMBER_OF[1]
Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, use 'a few', or use 'some'
Suggestion: a few; some
... following essay. First, when you have a small number of people around, you are able to be famil...
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Line 2, column 299, Rule ID: CANT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
...lation, there is a possibility that you cant recall their name sometime. My friends ...
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Line 2, column 756, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: wouldn't
...s distracted by her outer relation, she wouldnt make her husband upset. Secondly, as y...
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Line 3, column 482, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: couldn't
... in my house, and I was alone so that I couldnt pour a glass of water for myself. Then,...
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Line 4, column 84, Rule ID: PERIOD_OF_TIME[1]
Message: Use simply 'period'.
Suggestion: period
...e and small band of friends over a long period of time is more effective than a massive group ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, look, may, second, secondly, so, then, well, while, for example, i think, in conclusion, you know, in my opinion, in other words, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 15.1003584229 139% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 81.0 43.0788530466 188% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 55.0 52.1666666667 105% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1816.0 1977.66487455 92% => OK
No of words: 420.0 407.700716846 103% => OK
Chars per words: 4.32380952381 4.8611393121 89% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.52701905584 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.41116544867 2.67179642975 90% => OK
Unique words: 211.0 212.727598566 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.502380952381 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 571.5 618.680645161 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 20.0 9.59856630824 208% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 32.8923961155 48.9658058833 67% => OK
Chars per sentence: 75.6666666667 100.406767564 75% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.5 20.6045352989 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.04166666667 5.45110844103 129% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.155506142492 0.236089414692 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0492401057078 0.076458572812 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0617084461671 0.0737576698707 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.113746459871 0.150856017488 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0294885489656 0.0645574589148 46% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 7.7 11.7677419355 65% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 71.14 58.1214874552 122% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 10.1575268817 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 7.48 10.9000537634 69% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.15 8.01818996416 89% => OK
difficult_words: 71.0 86.8835125448 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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