TPO 47
By world quick changes, people have access to many different sources of information. Most of people thinks that they have to read all news out there and get informed by any means. In my opinion, it is important to just select news that really is related to you, otherwise you may encounter with inconvenience trouble. I feel this way for two reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
First of all, having great amount of news about whatever is happening around the world is time-consuming. To be more specific, you must allocate specific times for reading news and analyzing of those which is unlikely to be helpful in life. Therefore, it would cause waste of time because you can use your time in order to learn something new that will be useful in near future. My brother's experience is a compelling example of this. When he was in college, he was really eager to follow what is going around the world. He used to keep tracking all websites and internet sources that they doesn't even any relation with his major or life. This took about five hours of his golden moments. So, he wasn't able to focus on his education materials so that he was miles away from his classes. As a result, he failed first semester and he couldn't be successful on that period of time. Although he was in the horrible situation, he discerned that nothing is more valuable than his dedication time to his education and his unhelpful tracking news was a big mistake.
Second, among what websites and news agencies publish, there is lot of fake news. In others words, there are lots of biased news publisher and media which are main lead of partial information in the society because they are more eager to support their side instead of caring to provide accurate news for people. By looking for this kind of news, it is possible that you face bad consequences and it bring about misleading of people. My own story illustrates this is concept. Two years ago, I pursue seriously political and economic news through internet so that I can productively invest in stock market. Consequently, I get familiar with a website that gives wrong signal regarding market condition or even it delayed news. I trusted that reports and put huge money in inappropriate shares. Finally, I lost my whole money this way. As you can see, unpleasant events might be caused by this untruthful data.
In conclusion, I strongly believe that following everything that leaks in to the news centers is not logical. Not only can it be wast of time and a barrier to suitable activities, but also it can provide misunderstanig and misconception. I personally just follow what excatly is my need to be informed ablout and avoid looking for a bunch of invalid data.
- TPO 47 3
- The ability to maintain friendships with a small number of people over a long period of time is ?more important for happiness than the ability to make many new friends easily.? 70
- Some parents offer their school-age children money for each high grade (mark) they get in school. Do you think this is a good idea? 76
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 47, Rule ID: NUMEROUS_DIFFERENT[1]
Message: Use simply 'many'.
Suggestion: many
...ld quick changes, people have access to many different sources of information. Most of people...
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Line 2, column 602, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...ebsites and internet sources that they doesnt even any relation with his major or li...
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Line 2, column 711, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: wasn't
...e hours of his golden moments. So, he wasnt able to focus on his education material...
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Line 2, column 849, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: couldn't
...esult, he failed first semester and he couldnt be successful on that period of time. ...
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Line 2, column 879, Rule ID: PERIOD_OF_TIME[1]
Message: Use simply 'period'.
Suggestion: period
...er and he couldnt be successful on that period of time. Although he was in the horrible situ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, finally, first, if, look, may, really, regarding, second, so, therefore, i feel, in conclusion, kind of, as a result, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 28.0 15.1003584229 185% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.0286738351 154% => OK
Pronoun: 69.0 43.0788530466 160% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 66.0 52.1666666667 127% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2404.0 1977.66487455 122% => OK
No of words: 476.0 407.700716846 117% => OK
Chars per words: 5.05042016807 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.67091256922 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.99144025179 2.67179642975 112% => OK
Unique words: 281.0 212.727598566 132% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.590336134454 0.524837075471 112% => OK
syllable_count: 711.0 618.680645161 115% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 18.0 9.59856630824 188% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 58.9678711662 48.9658058833 120% => OK
Chars per sentence: 104.52173913 100.406767564 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.6956521739 20.6045352989 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.73913043478 5.45110844103 124% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.85842293907 207% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.236089414692 0% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.076458572812 0% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0737576698707 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.150856017488 0% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0645574589148 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.7 11.7677419355 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.01 10.9000537634 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.48 8.01818996416 106% => OK
difficult_words: 116.0 86.8835125448 134% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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