A/D: Parents should give school-age children money as reward for getting a high mark in their schools
Throughout the history, one of the main stimuli of human’s success has been the money. Generally, monetary issues are accounted as the powerful motivations that can draw people to particular conducts. A plethora of people is in the conviction that giving money to children is a good tool to encourage them to continue or repeat their acceptable manner. Contrary to this popular belief, there are those who argue that highlighting the role of money in the school-age children brings the variety of disadvantages to their life. I am of the opinion that, money is not a sensible means as a reward, and the following explanation will further elaborate on this perspective.
First and foremost, the complexity of today’s world puts on different kinds of pressure and stress to the society, and money is the primary element of modern life which becomes an integral part of it. Undoubtedly, children as one the most vulnerable segments has been affected by this simple but complicated factor. Children encounter various kinds of financial issues everywhere during a day; from their home to the society and school which can dramatically interfere with their normal growth since the monetary issue should not be a matter of concerns for children in that age. Therefore, it would not be sensible if the parents distribute their life with giving them money as a reward
Another crucial fact that should be taken into consideration is that school-age children, notably in early ages, cannot judge what is appropriate for their health, growth or even entertainment, so they want to have whatever they like. In this circumstance, giving money to them may have adverse consequences in their life; however, it may encourage them to continue their good deeds. Apparently, the importance of the subject is applying the correct and useful approach that provides enough incentive for children without paying money to them. For example, arranging a memorable night for them by going to a wonderful place. Of course, this element highly depends on the age-category of the kids, and in higher ages, for instance in high school, familiarizing them with these issues helps the teenagers that not only appreciate the money that they earn but also do not spend too much money for their demands.
On the basis of the point mentioned above, I am convinced that children should not urge to committing particular actions due to taking money as a reward. Obviously, pushing the children to financial issues has bad impact on their life, in addition to the fact that they may misuse their given money for wrong intentions.
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'apparently', 'but', 'first', 'however', 'if', 'may', 'so', 'therefore', 'for example', 'for instance', 'in addition', 'of course']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.228033472803 0.229887763892 99% => OK
Verbs: 0.135983263598 0.158761421928 86% => OK
Adjectives: 0.092050209205 0.0866891130778 106% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0523012552301 0.046263068375 113% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0564853556485 0.0685040099705 82% => OK
Prepositions: 0.135983263598 0.118717715034 115% => OK
Participles: 0.0418410041841 0.0351676179071 119% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.79227700217 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0355648535565 0.0309702414327 115% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.00188951952338 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.100418410042 0.0887237588012 113% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0230125523013 0.0209618222197 110% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0167364016736 0.0139019557991 120% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2604.0 2387.08602151 109% => OK
No of words: 428.0 408.028673835 105% => OK
Chars per words: 6.08411214953 5.86048508987 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.548423998 4.48200974243 101% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.366822429907 0.338922669872 108% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.280373831776 0.251872472559 111% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.207943925234 0.174417080927 119% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.130841121495 0.112833075102 116% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79227700217 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 230.0 212.727598566 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.53738317757 0.524397521467 102% => OK
Word variations: 62.095242608 59.2087087015 105% => OK
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6684587814 73% => OK
Sentence length: 28.5333333333 20.5533526081 139% => OK
Sentence length SD: 70.9955867173 48.84282405 145% => OK
Chars per sentence: 173.6 120.699889404 144% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.5333333333 20.5533526081 139% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.866666666667 0.644075263715 135% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.5376344086 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.54480286738 0% => OK
Readability: 56.5707165109 45.7405998639 124% => OK
Elegance: 1.65811965812 1.45489161554 114% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.229595302972 0.300154397459 76% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.121787338863 0.103427244359 118% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0627646016415 0.0752933317313 83% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.560142472856 0.497263757937 113% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.141705165363 0.151897553556 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.10890591864 0.114077575197 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0632075548865 0.0781384742642 81% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.476561634005 0.336927656856 141% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0427488274348 0.067059652881 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.180272166814 0.210909579961 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.035283574391 0.0618886996521 57% => The ideas may be duplicated in paragraphs.
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8870967742 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.86379928315 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.91756272401 0% => More neutral sentences wanted.
Positive topic words: 10.0 8.42114695341 119% => OK
Negative topic words: 4.0 2.4623655914 162% => OK
Neutral topic words: 0.0 2.75985663082 0% => More neutral topic words wanted.
Total topic words: 14.0 13.6433691756 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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