Advertising
People are living in an era when the proliferation of goods considerably facilitate their lives, coincide with vexing them to choose exactly what they really need. Defying the questions of credibility and authenticity, advertisements have indispensable merits. To some extent, the emergence of them can serve as a conducive approach to lead customers to purchase without tedious selection. Nevertheless, people's views diverge from each other on the question whether targeted advertisements towards children should be sustained. Some people hold the idea that this would benefit children the same way as it exert on adults. Conversely, others steadfastly boycott these advertisements for they may set off a string of irreversibly serious consequences on children. From my point of view, the differences of mental and physical conditions between the young and the adults may stand as a cogent limitation on children to choose goods composedly. In this regard, we need to contemplate before the publication of these targeted advertisements.
First and foremost, it's indisputable that children are too naive to discern things they really need, in this sense they may be driven by these seemingly eye-catching advertisements, begged their parents and clamor to buy things unwanted at all. The financial burdens foisted on the parents accordingly will definitely intensify the tensions of the family, especially for these young and newly-married couples. Besides this, these advertisements may urge children to eat junk food. Since these food could be exceedingly debilitating, they may even make damages on children's bodies at children's most flourishing age. This kind of accidents are inevitable. Taking my nephew as an example, he is only 4 years old, however, under the temptations of advertisements for fried-chicken, he has gained surprising weights in several months and eventually diagnosed to be unhealthy to some extent because of over intake of fat.
Furthermore, these advertisements can serve as a tool to entice children to buy exorbitant clothes or shoes to boast with their friends. Children are malleable and credulous for they are too young to gain the ability of self-discipline and are easily entrapped themselves with the vicious spiral of pursuing brands blindly. The rapidly increasing figure of luxury clothes dressed on children exemplify the fact that the trend of showing off apparels substantially catch on among children. This situation may even escalate if parents have no means to refuse their children's persistent requests.
To illustrate, advertisements do enable us to buy favorable goods without the hassle of comparing everything arduously before purchasing, but their positive influences are mainly on mature and clear-minded groups. When it comes to advertising directly towards children, we can not assure that these advertisements would not hamper the innocent and healthy growing process of children and lead them astray.
In a nutshell, blemishes encompassed within advertisements towards children reinforce the idea that this kind of targeted advertisements are detrimental for the family. To put it another way, we may bide undesirable consequences if we downplay the insidious risks of these advertisements. Based on these statements mentioned before, I want to reiterate my standpoint that by no means should advertisements directly towards children be allowed.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
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Message: Can you shorten this phrase to just 'whether', or rephrase the sentence to avoid "the question"?
Suggestion: whether
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Message: Did you mean 'this food' or 'these foods'?
Suggestion: this food; these foods
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, besides, but, conversely, first, furthermore, however, if, may, nevertheless, really, so, then, kind of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 19.0 9.8082437276 194% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 53.0 43.0788530466 123% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 79.0 52.1666666667 151% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2894.0 1977.66487455 146% => OK
No of words: 515.0 407.700716846 126% => OK
Chars per words: 5.61941747573 4.8611393121 116% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.763781212 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.28077430862 2.67179642975 123% => OK
Unique words: 292.0 212.727598566 137% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.566990291262 0.524837075471 108% => OK
syllable_count: 889.2 618.680645161 144% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.94265232975 202% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.0346692628 48.9658058833 106% => OK
Chars per sentence: 125.826086957 100.406767564 125% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.3913043478 20.6045352989 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.04347826087 5.45110844103 93% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 3.85842293907 259% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.25113151057 0.236089414692 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0925004882372 0.076458572812 121% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.114716155628 0.0737576698707 156% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.187926702364 0.150856017488 125% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0931137852551 0.0645574589148 144% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.2 11.7677419355 138% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.69 58.1214874552 70% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 10.1575268817 129% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.61 10.9000537634 143% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.63 8.01818996416 120% => OK
difficult_words: 160.0 86.8835125448 184% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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