Television advertising has various influences to different ages. Regarding this, some think that advertisements directed to young children should be banned. However, I personally believe that television advertisements targeted for children between two and five should be allowed for two reasons: effectiveness and fairness.
First and foremost, targeting young children can be an effective strategy for advertisement companies. To be specific, since children have a limited perspective, they will likely urge their parents to buy the products that are advertised. Therefore, if companies make the products look appealing to them, companies will likely have huge profits. For example, I have a young cousin who is five years old. His favorite character is Spiderman, and he wants to have every merchandise related to his favorite character. At first, his mom couldn’t help buying the products because she thought it would make his son satisfied. Now, his mom feels tired when he wants something on television advertisement.This clearly shows that the younger the children are, the more likely they are to beg their parents to buy the products that are advertised on television, and it is definitely effective for the companies to target young consumers, children aged between two to five.
In addition, it would be unfair for the companies if the law banned them from producing advertisements that are targeted toward young children. Specifically, it would be unconstitutional since it violates one of the most fundamental laws in the constitution: freedom of advertisement. For instance, I once read an article about an advertising company that was sued by a family. The parents insisted that addictive food advertisements such as chocolate or candies harmed their son's health. However, the judge concluded that the company did not have any legal responsibility for advertising addictive food advertisements and also mentioned that it is the parents’ responsibility to regulate their son from watching excessive amounts of television. This definitely proves that it is unconstitutional for the government to ban the companies from making targeted advertisements.
Admittedly, some could argue that those advertisements could have negative influences on young children and their family. However, since it is an effective way of advertising and would be unconstitutional if the government did not allow it, I strongly disagree with the statement that television advertising directed toward young children should be banned.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: This
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, however, if, look, regarding, so, therefore, for example, for instance, in addition, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 47.0 43.0788530466 109% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 52.1666666667 71% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2151.0 1977.66487455 109% => OK
No of words: 383.0 407.700716846 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.61618798956 4.8611393121 116% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.42384287591 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.33389592745 2.67179642975 125% => OK
Unique words: 193.0 212.727598566 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.503916449086 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 671.4 618.680645161 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.51630824373 119% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 69.8075838676 48.9658058833 143% => OK
Chars per sentence: 119.5 100.406767564 119% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.2777777778 20.6045352989 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.83333333333 5.45110844103 107% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8709677419 51% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.85842293907 207% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.415767508019 0.236089414692 176% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.143590333003 0.076458572812 188% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.15209055882 0.0737576698707 206% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.334150247556 0.150856017488 222% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.173551297695 0.0645574589148 269% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.7 11.7677419355 133% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 33.24 58.1214874552 57% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 10.1575268817 136% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.32 10.9000537634 141% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.06 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 86.8835125448 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 16.0 10.247311828 156% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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