Because modern life is very complex, it is essential for young people to have the ability to plan and organize.
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
I do believe that it is necessary for young people to learn how to be well-planed and well-organized in such an era of fast pace. It could be hard for young people to handle a lot of complicated situation without these two qualities.
Firstly, students whoever in primary schools, high schools, and collages, usually need to study a huge number of different subjects in a semester. Every student has the experience that many deadlines coming at the same time, and they’re must under a great pressure at that time. However, if young people know how to make a suitable schedule, they can prepare well for the exams in such time-restricted circumstances. Furthermore, some undergraduate students who're taking part-time jobs especially need to learn how to spend their time smartly. They have to save time to work, no matter they aim to make more money to solve their financial problems, or to develop their professional skills. If they fail to avoid that classes overlapping the working schedule, they'll meet a huge mess. Being a good planer also make them balance their work and life, they don't need to give up exercising or making friends only because they have a busy schedule.
Secondly, being organized could help students to be efficient both in studying and in daily life. For instance, if they're able to make all course materials organized, they definitely can learn faster and perform better in the presentations and assignments; if they're able to make the dorm rooms organized, they would save a lot of time that might be used to look for missing stuffs. As we know, modern life is expensive, and time is money. Once they're organized, they'll have extra time to do other things which they really want to do, such like attending to a meaningful project which they really interested in, or having a part-time job to make more money. It could either increase their income, or enhance their academic knowledge, so they may get more chances to have a decent job when they graduated.
Last but not least, the one who's well-planed and well-organized also means that he/she has a strong willpower and self-control ability. It's as important to execute the plan as making it. During the process of approaching independence, there're a lot of things may cause them to be distracted, but if they can always keep in mind and follow their plans step by step, they'll reach the goals finally.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, firstly, furthermore, however, if, look, may, really, second, secondly, so, well, for instance
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 39.0 43.0788530466 91% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 52.1666666667 92% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1995.0 1977.66487455 101% => OK
No of words: 404.0 407.700716846 99% => OK
Chars per words: 4.93811881188 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.48327461151 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.99405821907 2.67179642975 112% => OK
Unique words: 233.0 212.727598566 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.576732673267 0.524837075471 110% => OK
syllable_count: 612.0 618.680645161 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 7.0 1.86738351254 375% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 1.0 4.94265232975 20% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 55.7188940639 48.9658058833 114% => OK
Chars per sentence: 117.352941176 100.406767564 117% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.7647058824 20.6045352989 115% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.11764705882 5.45110844103 131% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.5376344086 163% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.117001796325 0.236089414692 50% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0431664037813 0.076458572812 56% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0379157754052 0.0737576698707 51% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0822517237466 0.150856017488 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0365970881763 0.0645574589148 57% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.7 11.7677419355 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 58.1214874552 97% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.67 10.9000537634 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.94 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 86.8835125448 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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