Children rely too much on the technology, like computers, smart phones, video games
for fun and entertainment. Playing simpler toys or playing outside with friends would
be better for children’s development.
Nowadays, children development has become the top concern of modern citizens. When it comes to whether it is better for children that allow them to play outside with friends or not, views are various. Quite a few, if not the majority, believe that children should rely on technology for fun, while in contrast, i consider that should should play toys and play outside with friends.
To start with, playing computers or smart phone hurts children eyes. There is no denying that technology have radiation, which damage children health. On the other hand, playing outside improve children healthy condition, through breathing the fresh air and doing sports. For example, my sister named Grace always plays with her friend at the weekend. They run around the ground, climb the small mountain, and play ball games, which enable my sister to become stronger, and seldom does she gets sick. Thus, i believe that it it better for children play toys and play outside.
Furthermore, through playing with friends and toys, children will know how to communicate with others, which is beneficial for them when they entered the school. Social is important even among children, and by playing with others children can improve their social skills. A quintessential example would be my little brother. Since he was young, five or six years old, he often hang out with his friends, or play toys at home with peers. By doing so, he know how to get well with others, and how to talk to friends. Later, when he entered the primary school, he know how to make friends and became the social king.
Granted, some believe that children should play technical games such as computers or smart phones, which is also reasonable to some extent. Parents would save a lot of trouble if children play online games. However, the disadvantage of playing online games is larger. Children may become afraid of communicating with others and only immerse in their own world, which is not beneficial for their mental development.
In conclusion, after the thorough analysis of aforementioned statements, I shall maintain that it is better for children that allow them play toys and hang out with friends rather than play online games.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 312, Rule ID: I_LOWERCASE[2]
Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
... technology for fun, while in contrast, i consider that should should play toys a...
^
Line 1, column 328, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: should
...fun, while in contrast, i consider that should should play toys and play outside with friends...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 491, Rule ID: DOES_NP_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'get'?
Suggestion: get
...to become stronger, and seldom does she gets sick. Thus, i believe that it it better...
^^^^
Line 3, column 491, Rule ID: DOES_X_HAS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'get'? As 'do' is already inflected, the verb cannot also be inflected.
Suggestion: get
...to become stronger, and seldom does she gets sick. Thus, i believe that it it better...
^^^^
Line 3, column 508, Rule ID: I_LOWERCASE[2]
Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
...r, and seldom does she gets sick. Thus, i believe that it it better for children ...
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Line 3, column 523, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: it
...oes she gets sick. Thus, i believe that it it better for children play toys and play ...
^^^^^
Line 3, column 529, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'betters', 'wells'?
Suggestion: betters; wells
...e gets sick. Thus, i believe that it it better for children play toys and play outside...
^^^^^^
Line 5, column 378, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[3]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'hangs'.
Suggestion: hangs
... young, five or six years old, he often hang out with his friends, or play toys at h...
^^^^
Line 5, column 454, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'knows'.
Suggestion: knows
...oys at home with peers. By doing so, he know how to get well with others, and how to...
^^^^
Line 5, column 562, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'knows'.
Suggestion: knows
... when he entered the primary school, he know how to make friends and became the soci...
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, furthermore, however, if, may, so, thus, well, while, for example, in conclusion, in contrast, such as, to start with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 43.0788530466 81% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 52.1666666667 92% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1840.0 1977.66487455 93% => OK
No of words: 367.0 407.700716846 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.0136239782 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37689890912 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.45208597164 2.67179642975 92% => OK
Unique words: 196.0 212.727598566 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.534059945504 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 516.6 618.680645161 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.7845366134 48.9658058833 85% => OK
Chars per sentence: 92.0 100.406767564 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.35 20.6045352989 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.1 5.45110844103 130% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 5.5376344086 181% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.411377246559 0.236089414692 174% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.141689479426 0.076458572812 185% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0924959592986 0.0737576698707 125% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.26464325887 0.150856017488 175% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0604257337253 0.0645574589148 94% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.3 11.7677419355 96% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 70.13 58.1214874552 121% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.9 10.1575268817 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.78 10.9000537634 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.28 8.01818996416 91% => OK
difficult_words: 64.0 86.8835125448 74% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.