A company is going to give some money either to support the arts or to protect the environment. Which do you think the company should choose? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

Since the dawn of humanity, people have been engaged in a great struggle to find the best way of spending money. From ancient civilization to modern ages, as time passed by, People's attitude towards spending money has changed drastically. Nowadays, most of companies do some (many) activities as their social responsibility. In today’s world, however, there is a heated controversy about the ways of performing social responsibility. Generally, there does not a unanimous opinion toward this issue. While some people hold the opinion that company should spend money on supporting arts, others believe spending money on protecting the environment is more essential. As far as I am concerned, the latter view is more acceptable as I believe protecting environment reduce dangerous incidents. Additionally spending money on preserving environment and nature help people to have a better life in future.
First of all, by spending money on protecting environment we can prevent harmful incidents. People have been striven against natural disaster for many years. Some of disasters occur due to human activities, such as cutting trees, building dams and so on. By spending money on environment protection we can reduce side effects of human’s activities. Planting new plants, developing new technologies to reduce air pollution can help nature to reproduce itself.
Secondly, by spending money on environment protection we can help next generation to have better life conditions. The most important persons for everyone is his or her child. People and governments, all around the world, struggle to have a better next generation. Next generations need vital resources such as clean weather, water and air for living in appropriate life conditions. We can help them by protecting the environment through preventing overuse of vital resources. Preventing earth warming and wastewater purification are the most important things we can do for next generation.
To draw a conclusion grounded on the above statements, I subscribe to the idea of spending money on protecting environment. This selection is due to several reasons, two of which –that is- reducing dangerous incidents and helping people to have a better life in future are of utmost importance. As Gandhi once said and I am quoting “protecting your environment to protect humanity”. Having this in mind, I strongly urge to the idea of environment protection instead of supporting arts as I care about the next generation of humans.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 250, Rule ID: MOST_SOME_OF_NNS[1]
Message: After 'most of', you should use 'the' ('most of the companies') or simply say ''most companies''.
Suggestion: most of the companies; most companies
...oney has changed drastically. Nowadays, most of companies do some many activities as their social...
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Line 1, column 794, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Additionally,
...environment reduce dangerous incidents. Additionally spending money on preserving environmen...
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Line 1, column 893, Rule ID: IN_PAST[1]
Message: Did you mean: 'in the future'?
Suggestion: in the future
...ature help people to have a better life in future. First of all, by spending money on pr...
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Line 2, column 158, Rule ID: MOST_SOME_OF_NNS[1]
Message: After 'Some of', you should use 'the' ('Some of the disasters') or simply say ''Some disasters''.
Suggestion: Some of the disasters; Some disasters
...gainst natural disaster for many years. Some of disasters occur due to human activities, such as ...
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Discourse Markers used:
['first', 'however', 'if', 'second', 'secondly', 'so', 'while', 'such as', 'first of all']

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.255033557047 0.229887763892 111% => OK
Verbs: 0.17225950783 0.158761421928 109% => OK
Adjectives: 0.118568232662 0.0866891130778 137% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0357941834452 0.046263068375 77% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0380313199105 0.0685040099705 56% => OK
Prepositions: 0.125279642058 0.118717715034 106% => OK
Participles: 0.0782997762864 0.0351676179071 223% => Less participles wanted.
Conjunctions: 3.16411607029 2.67179642975 118% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0313199105145 0.0309702414327 101% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.00188951952338 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.0671140939597 0.0887237588012 76% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0156599552573 0.0209618222197 75% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.00223713646532 0.0139019557991 16% => Some subClauses wanted starting by 'Which, Who, What, Whom, Whose.....'

Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2505.0 2387.08602151 105% => OK
No of words: 390.0 408.028673835 96% => OK
Chars per words: 6.42307692308 5.86048508987 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44391917772 4.48200974243 99% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.425641025641 0.338922669872 126% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.328205128205 0.251872472559 130% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.248717948718 0.174417080927 143% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.194871794872 0.112833075102 173% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.16411607029 2.67179642975 118% => OK
Unique words: 207.0 212.727598566 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.530769230769 0.524397521467 101% => OK
Word variations: 59.1270044446 59.2087087015 100% => OK
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6684587814 111% => OK
Sentence length: 16.9565217391 20.5533526081 83% => OK
Sentence length SD: 28.010327558 48.84282405 57% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.913043478 120.699889404 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.9565217391 20.5533526081 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.391304347826 0.644075263715 61% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.5376344086 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.54480286738 72% => OK
Readability: 49.7770345596 45.7405998639 109% => OK
Elegance: 1.86363636364 1.45489161554 128% => OK

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.328706652795 0.300154397459 110% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.0878417223103 0.103427244359 85% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0655559584006 0.0752933317313 87% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.43459117534 0.497263757937 87% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.120750108251 0.151897553556 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.110553179006 0.114077575197 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0723234018515 0.0781384742642 93% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.294222045599 0.336927656856 87% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0176749889526 0.067059652881 26% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.228024968505 0.210909579961 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0754904548587 0.0618886996521 122% => OK

Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8870967742 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.86379928315 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.91756272401 122% => OK
Positive topic words: 11.0 8.42114695341 131% => OK
Negative topic words: 2.0 2.4623655914 81% => OK
Neutral topic words: 5.0 2.75985663082 181% => OK
Total topic words: 18.0 13.6433691756 132% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

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Rates: 75.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.5 Out of 30
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