TPO-26 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?It is better for children to choose jobs that are similar to their parents’ jobs than to choose jobs that are very different from their parents’ job.Use specific r

Since the dawn of humanity, people have been engaged in the great struggle of doing the jobs as efficient as possible. At ancient times, jobs were simple and only based on physical abilities. However, as time passed by, jobs became more and more complicated and required different skills. There are different methods one can choose a job. Some continue their fathers' jobs, some attend a college to learn how to do a job, and some even start an innovative job. The big question is then; which of these methods is more useful? There does not exist a unanimous opinion toward this issue as there are numerous facts and reasons which are inextricably interwoven with one another that affect the application of each method. While some people hold the opinion that it is not good for the children to choose the jobs similar to their parents' jobs, some are of the opinion that this method of choosing a job has advantages over other methods. As far as I am concerned, I have a penchant toward the latter as I believe by choosing one's parents' job one can enjoy the privilege of being educated and trained on that job as well as possible. Additionally, continuing parents' job blesses the people with potential customers and gives them the option of thinking of innovations.
The most distinguished part of a job is the individual's ability in doing that job. This is especially more important in a competitive world. With the population growth and emergence of numerous factories and companies providing goods and services, the quality of the products was the most important deciding factor for customers. The quality is not achieved unless one has great knowledge and ability in doing a job. Being trained since the early ages gives a child the ability to present the best quality possible when he or she is responsible for the production.
Another privilege of choosing a job similar to parents' jobs is having potential and actual customers. Imagine a manager running a paper company. Due to years of endeavor and advertisement, he has been able to find numerous long-term customers. What happens when he is retired and his daughter is in charge? She is facing numerous loyal customers who are a great contribute to the company's profits. This is not true when one starts a new job. A beginner should spend most of the time advertising and offering interesting prices to attract customers, which as we know, is the hardest part of a job.
Last but not least, A person doing a job similar to that of his or her parents, has the ability to think of innovation. As stated in the second paragraph, these people are usually trained at the early ages. As a result and by experience gained in several years, they become familiar with all aspects of a job. This is the crucial point in innovation. An innovator should be familiar with all the processes, specifications, and details in a job to be able to think of innovations. As a result, children who have this privilege are able to think of a method for improving efficiency and reducing cost which is an important factor in competing with their competitors. While other companies are conflicting with solving the problems in their production line or training their employees, people having these kinds of jobs can think of finding a way to reduce electricity consumption leading to a decrease in the product's price.
To draw the conclusion grounded on the above statements, I subscribe to the idea of children choosing jobs similar to their parents' jobs. This selection is due to numerous reason, three of which that is being able to have proper training, having potential and actual customers, and being able to think of innovations are of utmost importance. As Bill Gates once said and I am quoting, "There is one way I could be more successful than today and that is my father being Bill Gates." Having this in mind, I strongly urge to the idea of children choosing jobs similar to that of their parents.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 1023, Rule ID: ONES[1]
Message: Did you mean 'one's'?
Suggestion: one's
...ard the latter as I believe by choosing ones parents job one can enjoy the privilege...
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Line 2, column 45, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'individuals'' or 'individual's'?
Suggestion: individuals'; individual's
...most distinguished part of a job is the individuals ability in doing that job. This is espe...
^^^^^^^^^^^

Discourse Markers used:
['but', 'however', 'if', 'second', 'so', 'then', 'well', 'while', 'as a result', 'as well as']

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.234270414993 0.229887763892 102% => OK
Verbs: 0.165997322624 0.158761421928 105% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0963855421687 0.0866891130778 111% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0374832663989 0.046263068375 81% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0361445783133 0.0685040099705 53% => OK
Prepositions: 0.111111111111 0.118717715034 94% => OK
Participles: 0.0575635876841 0.0351676179071 164% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.74363176289 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0334672021419 0.0309702414327 108% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.00188951952338 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.124497991968 0.0887237588012 140% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.00803212851406 0.0209618222197 38% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0174029451138 0.0139019557991 125% => OK

Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 3956.0 2387.08602151 166% => OK
No of words: 681.0 408.028673835 167% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.80910425844 5.86048508987 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 5.10842213422 4.48200974243 114% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.339207048458 0.338922669872 100% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.26872246696 0.251872472559 107% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.186490455213 0.174417080927 107% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.117474302496 0.112833075102 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74363176289 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 295.0 212.727598566 139% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.433186490455 0.524397521467 83% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
Word variations: 54.0658287429 59.2087087015 91% => OK
How many sentences: 32.0 20.6684587814 155% => OK
Sentence length: 21.28125 20.5533526081 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 60.86818975 48.84282405 125% => OK
Chars per sentence: 123.625 120.699889404 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.28125 20.5533526081 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.3125 0.644075263715 49% => More Discourse Markers wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.5376344086 110% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.54480286738 36% => OK
Readability: 48.153496696 45.7405998639 105% => OK
Elegance: 1.68156424581 1.45489161554 116% => OK

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.333619070306 0.300154397459 111% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.0920143814916 0.103427244359 89% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.066111745426 0.0752933317313 88% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.468836498181 0.497263757937 94% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.162474359739 0.151897553556 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.117448988617 0.114077575197 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0882050496541 0.0781384742642 113% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.436112078472 0.336927656856 129% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0372595807154 0.067059652881 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.239098730443 0.210909579961 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0735973118799 0.0618886996521 119% => OK

Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 21.0 11.8870967742 177% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.86379928315 52% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.91756272401 183% => Less neutral sentences wanted.
Positive topic words: 15.0 8.42114695341 178% => OK
Negative topic words: 2.0 2.4623655914 81% => OK
Neutral topic words: 6.0 2.75985663082 217% => OK
Total topic words: 23.0 13.6433691756 169% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

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